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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.16

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 16
International tourism is one of the biggest industries contributing towards the economic growth of a country. It does create some conflicts between locals and visitors but these are not complicated issues and hence I do not agree with the argument that it creates more tension than understanding. International tourism creates some worries because there is a cultural difference between the tourists and the locals. The tourists who visit foreign countries are not completely aware of the culture and the traditions of that country, because of which they are misunderstood for their activities by the natives. As a result, the locals sometimes take offence leading to conflicts and misunderstandings between them and the visitors. For instance, locals in Tirupati caught a foreign tourist, who tried to enter the temple with a bottle of beer. Later the tourist was informed of the religious significance of that temple. On the bright side, international tourism plays a major role in promoting global peace and understanding. When people visit other countries, they learn to respect their culture and way of life. This facilitates better relationship between countries. As for the conflicts, they can be resolved easily. Both the locals and the tourist should be aware of the cultural differences and the locals cannot expect the foreigners to know everything about the tradition of the place they are visiting. Furthermore, locals should not get into conflicts with tourists; rather they should make the tourists understand the traditional values and the ethics. Similarly, foreigners should give respect and cooperate with the local people in order to avoid any unnecessary conflicts. The government of both the countries should educate the people to understand the cultural difference and how to deal with such issues. In conclusion, though some conflicts may arise due to the growing popularity of international tourism, in my opinion, it is largely a positive trend and needs to be promoted. The minor issues that could arise can be sorted out with a little effort.
International
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tourism
is one of the biggest industries contributing towards the economic growth of a
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country
. It does create
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some
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conflicts
between
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locals
and visitors
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but
these are not complicated issues and
hence
I do not
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agree
with the argument that it creates more tension than understanding.

International
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tourism
creates
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some
worries
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because
there is a cultural difference between the
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tourists
and the
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locals
. The
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tourists
who visit foreign
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countries
are not completely aware of the culture and the traditions of that
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country
,
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because
of which they are misunderstood for their activities by the natives.
As a result
, the
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locals
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sometimes
take
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offence
leading to
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conflicts
and misunderstandings between them and the visitors.
For instance
,
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locals
in
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Tirupati
caught a foreign
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tourist
, who tried to enter the temple with a bottle of beer. Later the
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tourist
was informed
of the religious significance of that temple.

On the bright side, international
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tourism
plays a major role in promoting global peace and understanding. When
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people
visit other
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countries
, they learn to respect their culture and way of life. This facilitates better relationship between countries.

As for the
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conflicts
, they can
be resolved
easily
. Both the
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locals
and the
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tourist
should be aware of the cultural differences and the
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locals
cannot
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expect
the foreigners to know everything about the tradition of the place they are visiting.
Furthermore
,
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locals
should not
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get
into
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conflicts
with
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tourists
;
rather
they should
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make
the
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tourists
understand the traditional values and the ethics.
Similarly
, foreigners should give respect and cooperate with the
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local
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people
in order to avoid any unnecessary
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conflicts
. The
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government
of both the
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countries
should educate the
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people
to understand the cultural difference and how to deal with such issues.

In conclusion
, though
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some
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conflicts
may arise due to the growing popularity of international
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tourism
, in my opinion, it is
largely
a
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positive
trend and needs to
be promoted
. The minor issues that could arise can
be sorted
out with a
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little
effort.
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30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 16

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
328 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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