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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.15

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 15
In these days, the world is a global village and people can travel easily everywhere in the world without any difficulties. Various countries have different culture and traditions, but mostly natives do not force the tourist to follow their rituals and customs. As we know that different region people behave according to their areas, but the international tourist industry has been created the hurdle and stressful conditions between natives and outsiders. Mostly tourists travel different regions: therefore, they can explore the uniqueness of other areas. Their clothing, living and food are different from foreigners, as regional people are living their lives according to their environment: on the other hand, it is hard for other people`s country to accept them because they are living their lives according to their circumstances. This conflict can make a tough situation between two nationals, but we should always remember the basic moral values of travelling and respect the other nations, but these difficulties can be solved by touring companies, whereas these companies create the more dramatic conditions. On the other side of the picture, if we do our travelling arrangements by ourselves, we can easily get a visa and have less expensive trips without involvement of travel agency. Moreover, today is the era of the internet, we can easily get information about any region within a second; so, we should gather information about everything about that area before travelling that area. In this way, we can avoid the misunderstanding. To sum up all the arguments, travelling is not a difficult task if we do it with full preparation. With the help of internet and sweet behaviour, we can go anywhere in this world and enjoy that place.
In these days, the world is a global village and
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people
can travel
easily
everywhere in the world without any difficulties. Various countries have
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different
culture and traditions,
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but
mostly
natives do not force the tourist to follow their rituals and customs. As we know that
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different
region
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people
behave according to their
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areas
,
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but
the international tourist industry has
been created
the hurdle and stressful conditions between natives and outsiders.

Mostly
tourists travel
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different
regions:
therefore
, they can explore the uniqueness of
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other
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areas
. Their clothing, living and food are
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different
from foreigners, as regional
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people
are living their
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lives
according to their environment: on the
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other
hand, it is
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hard
for
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other
The character between 'people' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "people’s" (curly apostrophe) or "people's" (straight apostrophe).
people`s
country to accept them
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because
they are living their
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lives
according to their circumstances. This conflict can
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make
a tough situation between two nationals,
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but
we should always remember the basic moral values of
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travelling
and respect the
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other
nations,
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but
these difficulties can
be solved
by touring
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companies
, whereas these
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companies
create the more dramatic conditions.

On the
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other
side of the picture, if we do our
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travelling
arrangements by ourselves, we can
easily
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get
a visa and have less expensive trips without involvement of travel agency.
Moreover
,
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today
is the era of the internet, we can
easily
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get
information about any region within a second;
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so
, we should gather information about everything about that
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area
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before
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travelling
that
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area
. In this way, we can avoid the misunderstanding.

To sum up all the arguments,
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travelling
is not a difficult task if we do it with full preparation. With the
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help
of internet and sweet
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behaviour
, we can go anywhere in this world and enjoy that place.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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