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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.13

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 13
These days, tourists from different states are visiting other countries, and tourism has now become a mega-industry. It is argued that this has created problems instead of an understanding between citizens of different nations. This essay fully disagrees with this argument and believes that tourism has boosted people’s relations because it provides employment for the locals and improves bilateral ties by bridging the gap in the difference of opinion. Firstly, international tourism improves the job prospects of a country and it helps in creating relations between different states. That is to say, when people visit a specific destination, they purchase goods, stay in a hotel and visiting tourist sites, and to accommodates more tourists the more employees are required, hence the job opportunities are boosted. For example, it was reported by one of Mexico’s newspapers, that after US citizen’s tourism in Mexico increased the unemployment in the country dramatically reduced and locals started appreciating this vistor surge. Secondly, tourism has an enormous positive impact on bilateral ties between nations. When people travel to countries, they tends to respect the difference of opinion of their hosts and this massively bridges the gap of cultural difference, this, in turn, enhances the diplomatic relation between them. This situation has been widely observed among those countries who in the past has shared hostile relation towards each other, and tourism has acted as an ambassador to curb tensed relations, For instance, a report published by the government of South Korea stated that country’s diplomatic ties with North Korea has substantially increased after over last 2 years when the tourism among them was opened after a decade ban. In conclusion, I believe that tourism has created an understanding between various countries and cultures and this has surged the employments for the local and have dramatically improved the bilateral relations.
These days, tourists from
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different
states are visiting other
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countries
, and
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tourism
has
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now
become a mega-industry. It
is argued
that this has created problems
instead
of an understanding between citizens of
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different
nations. This essay
fully
disagrees with this argument and believes that
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tourism
has boosted
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people
’s
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relations
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because
it provides employment for the locals and
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improves
bilateral ties by bridging the gap in the difference of opinion.

Firstly
, international
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tourism
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improves
the job prospects of a
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country
and it
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helps
in creating
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relations
between
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different
states.
That is
to say, when
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people
visit a specific destination, they
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purchase
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goods
, stay in a hotel and visiting tourist sites, and to accommodates more tourists the more employees
are required
,
hence
the job opportunities
are boosted
.
For example
, it
was reported
by one of Mexico’s newspapers, that after US citizen’s
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tourism
in Mexico increased the unemployment in the
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country
dramatically
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reduced
and locals
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started
appreciating this
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vistor
surge.

Secondly
,
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tourism
has an enormous
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positive
impact on bilateral ties between nations. When
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people
travel to
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countries
, they
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tends
to respect the difference of opinion of their hosts and this
massively
bridges the gap of cultural difference, this, in turn, enhances the diplomatic
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relation
between them. This situation has been
widely
observed among those
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countries
who in the past has shared hostile
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relation
towards each other, and
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tourism
has acted as an ambassador to curb tensed
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relations
,
For instance
, a report published by the
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government
of South Korea stated that
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country’s
diplomatic ties with North Korea has
substantially
increased after over last 2 years when the
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tourism
among them
was opened
after a decade ban.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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tourism
has created an understanding between various
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countries
and cultures and this has surged the employments for the local and have
dramatically
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improved
the bilateral
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relations
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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