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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.10

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 10
Nowadays the international touristry is getting bigger year by year due to people are travelling more and more for having new adventures, to view the history and civilization of different places. I disagree on topic that due to international touristry it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures because when people explore new culture, they adapt that type understanding of that culture this means that people get unsurprisingly expect the culture. Firstly, due to tourism the people who explore new places help them to understand newer cultures, get to know values of that region or nation, know new communities. The international travel makes profits for companies, then the government or nations can build new infrastructure not only for local people, but also for international tourists. For example: - young people who are mainly exploring new places internationally not only travel but also for education also such as students from Asian people are going to the United States of America for higher education this means exploring more tourist site in this nation or region. The second main reason is people get a real experience that people mostly watch in documentary, television and movies. When people visit this district, they get to experience the atmosphere, feel the nature, visit zoos and historical places also. When someone visits neighborhood like Africa tourist people can also help the government against the animal hunting currently on rise of that zone. This can make other region people to get involved in this and create an awareness about some problems. Through this we can conclude I disagree on topic that due to international tourism it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures, that international travel is important to get a greater understanding about different cultures.
Nowadays the
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international
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touristry
is getting bigger year by year
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due
to
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people
are travelling more and more for having
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new
adventures, to view the history and civilization of
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different
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places
. I disagree on topic that
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due
to
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international
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touristry
it creates tension
rather
than
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understanding
between
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people
from
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different
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cultures
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because
when
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people
explore
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new
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culture
, they adapt that type
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understanding
of that
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culture
this means that
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people
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get
unsurprisingly
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expect
the culture.

Firstly
,
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due
to tourism the
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people
who explore
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new
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places
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help
them to understand newer
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cultures
,
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get
to know values of that region or nation, know
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new
communities. The
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international
travel
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makes
profits for
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companies
, then the
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government
or nations can build
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new
infrastructure not
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only
for local
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people
,
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international
tourists.
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young
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people
who are
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exploring
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new
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places
internationally
not
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only
travel
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also
for education
also
such as students from Asian
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people
are going to the United States of America for higher education this means exploring more tourist site in this nation or region.

The second main reason is
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people
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get
a real experience that
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people
mostly
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watch
in documentary, television and movies. When
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people
visit this district, they
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get
to experience the atmosphere, feel the nature, visit zoos and historical
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places
also
.
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When
someone visits neighborhood like Africa tourist
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people
can
also
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help
the
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government
against the animal hunting
currently
on rise of that zone. This can
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make
other region
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people
to
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get
involved in this and create an awareness about
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some
problems.

Through this we can conclude I disagree on topic that
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due
to
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international
tourism it creates tension
rather
than
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understanding
between
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people
from
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different
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cultures
, that
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international
travel is
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important
to
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get
a greater
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understanding
about
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different
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cultures
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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