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Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? v.1

Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1
People have argued about how the government should utilise their budgets on transportation areas. Some people think that the government should spend more money on developing streets and highways, while others believe that improving public transportations is the most important one. The following essay will discuss in details about it, but I do believe that both aspects are important and should be proportionately improved. On the one hand, a group of people think that the government should focus on improving their street, road and highway facilities. They believe that public accesses are vital for the economic development of the respective country. Without the existence of qualified roads and highways, it will be difficult for industries to grow, as there will be some obstacles for the supply of raw materials and deliveries of goods. Consequently, it will impact on the efficiency of many companies and also to the government's income tax. On the other hand, other people think governments should spend more budgets on improving and maintaining public transportation such as buses, trains, aeroplanes and ferries. They believe that if the government could improve the quality of these mass transportation facilities, it will reduce traffic and air pollution problems. As public transportations become more convenient and safe, more people will use them, and it will gradually reduce the number of private vehicle users. As a consequent, it will reduce traffic congestion and reduce air pollution as well. In conclusion, I personally believe that the government's spending on public accesses and transportations are both essentials. And it becomes the government's task to allocate those budgets proportionately for both areas since we could not focus on one area and abandoned the other. It would be useless for a country to have good public transportations, without the support of good roads and highways.
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have argued about how the
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government
should
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utilise
their budgets on
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transportation
areas.
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people
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think
that the
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government
should spend more money on developing streets and
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highways
, while others
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believe
that improving
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public
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transportations
is the most
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important
one. The following essay will discuss in
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details
about it,
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but
I do
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believe
that both aspects are
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important
and should be
proportionately
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improved
.

On the one hand, a group of
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people
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think
that the
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government
should focus on improving their street, road and
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highway
facilities. They
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believe
that
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public
accesses are vital for the economic development of the respective country. Without the existence of qualified roads and
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highways
, it will be difficult for industries to grow, as there will be
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some
obstacles for the supply of raw materials and deliveries of
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goods
.
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, it will impact on the efficiency of
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many
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companies
and
also
to the
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government
's income tax.

On the
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hand,
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people
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think
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governments
should spend more budgets on improving and maintaining
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public
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transportation
such as buses, trains,
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aeroplanes
and ferries. They
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could
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improve
the quality of these mass
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transportation
facilities, it will
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reduce
traffic and air pollution problems. As
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public
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transportations
become more convenient and safe, more
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people
will
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use
them, and it will
gradually
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reduce
the number of private vehicle users. As a consequent, it will
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reduce
traffic congestion and
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reduce
air pollution
as well
.

In conclusion
, I
personally
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believe
that the
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government
's spending on
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public
accesses and
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transportations
are both essentials. And it becomes the
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government
's task to allocate those budgets
proportionately
for both areas since we could not focus on one area and abandoned the
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other
. It would be useless for a country to have
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good
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public
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transportations
, without the support of
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good
roads and
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highways
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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