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Bus Service Elimination PlannedQ3 The university has decided to discontinue its free bus service for students. The reason given for this decision is that few students ride the buses and the buses are expensive to operate. Currently, the buses run from the v.1

Bus Service Elimination PlannedQ3 The university has decided to discontinue its free bus service for students. The reason given for this decision is that few students ride the buses and the buses are expensive to operate. Currently, the buses run from the v. 1
It is thought by some people that the most excellent mode of improving road safety is by decreasing the maximum speed limits on vehicles while others think there are better ways. In my opinion, I consider public enlightenment on the rules guiding road safety a better way in achieving this. On the one hand, while some people think that reducing maximum speed limits on vehicles is a major way in achieving sanity on our roads, I agree with this as it will curb the speed of some drivers and as a result, accidents will be greatly reduced. However, it should be noted that a recent study by federal road safety has shown that only 30 percent of accidents are caused by drivers driving at high speed hence other factors that causes such should be looked into. On the other hand, factors such as making phone calls while driving and watching television are major distractions and hence can serious accidents on the roads. Hence, the need for the government to create awareness through different social platforms the factors that causes accidents and how to curb such. For instance, I remember a neighbours son who died a few years ago as a result of watching his favourite movie while driving to work, he was so carried away that he didn't see the oncoming trailer that lost his break before the head on collision. It was really pathetic as it could have been avoided. In conclusion, although reduction in speed limits in vehicles can improve road sanity. There are other causes, such as watching television, eating or drinking and making of calls. As a result, this should also be taken into recognition and the public should be enlightened on how to avert such.
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limits on vehicles while others
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there are better ways. In my opinion, I consider public enlightenment on the
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safety a better way in achieving this.

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that reducing maximum
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limits on vehicles is a major way in achieving sanity on our
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drivers and
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safety has shown that
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accidents
are caused
by drivers driving at high
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hence
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factors that causes such should
be looked
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hand, factors such as making phone calls while driving and watching television are major distractions and
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accidents
on the
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.
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government
to create awareness through
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different
social platforms the factors that causes
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accidents
and how to curb such.
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son who
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a few years ago
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movie while driving to work, he was
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carried away that he didn't
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the oncoming trailer that lost his break
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the head on collision. It was
really
pathetic as it could have
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.

In conclusion
, although reduction in
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speed
limits in vehicles can
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improve
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road
sanity. There are
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causes, such as watching television, eating or drinking and making of calls.
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, this should
also
be taken
into recognition and the public should
be enlightened
on how to avert such.
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IELTS essay Bus Service Elimination PlannedQ3 The university has decided to discontinue its free bus service for students. The reason given for this decision is that few students ride the buses and the buses are expensive to operate. Currently, the buses run from the v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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