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Bus Service Elimination PlannedThe university has decided to discontinue its free bus service for students. The reason given for this decision is that few students ride the buses and the buses are expensive to operate. Currently, the buses run from the ce v.1

Bus Service Elimination PlannedThe university has decided to discontinue its free bus service for students. The reason given for this decision is that few students ride the buses and the buses are expensive to operate. Currently, the buses run from the ce v. 1
International tourism is regarded as a huge source of merits. Some countries' economies would depend solely on it. However, some are concerned with the impacts it has on the locals and the environment. There's no shortage of the advantages that tourism provides. From the foreign currency that improves the country's economy to the utilities that come along with tourists. A country that is considered to be popular tourist attraction is expected to have several facilities. For instance, when a country is to organize the world cup or the Olympic games, it improves its infrastructure and takes measures to ready itself for the tourists that would visit. Whether through providing enough public transportation, ensuring that the streets are clean and providing better service. Similarly, A place who is a main tourist attraction all year long is expected to have the same sort of hostility, which works in favour of the local inhabitants as well. Another advantage can be found in the cultural exchange; with many tourists of different nationalities, the citizen gets to know about various cultures and traditions and transmit their beliefs to the foreigners as well. Which promotes acceptance and helps with the integration of the world. However, Tourism has some disadvantages to it. Many tourist receiving countries suffer from hosting tourists; as they crowd the cities and litter the environments. Furthermore, many of the foreigners don't know the local laws and traditions which can lead to several problems, whether with the authorities or with the local inhabitants. Some of the developing countries can't afford the costs that come with tourism-transportation, infrastructure, services. . . Etc. -And end up with heavy burdens to provide such accommodations. Which makes us question if the perks of tourism outweigh its costs? In conclusion, tourism is an enormous source of benefits and is considered to be the main source of living for many people. Yes, it has disadvantages like anything in the world, but such disadvantages aren't a hinder and could be dealt with. Therefore, it remains beneficial, with lots of advantages and opportunities to offer.
International
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tourism
is regarded
as a huge source of merits.
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Some
countries' economies would depend
solely
on it.
However
,
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some
are concerned
with the impacts it has on the
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locals
and the environment.

There's no shortage of the advantages that
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tourism
provides. From the foreign currency that
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improves
the country's economy to the utilities that
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come
along with
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tourists
. A
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country
that
is considered
to be popular
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tourist
attraction is
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expected
to have several facilities.
For instance
, when a
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country
is to organize the world cup or the
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Olympic games
, it
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improves
its infrastructure and takes measures to ready itself for the
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tourists
that would visit. Whether through providing
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enough
public transportation, ensuring that the streets are clean and providing better service.
Similarly
, A place who is a main
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tourist
attraction all year long is
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expected
to have the same sort of hostility, which works in
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favour
of the
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local
inhabitants
as well
. Another advantage can
be found
in the cultural exchange; with
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many
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tourists
of
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different
nationalities, the citizen
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gets
to know about various cultures and traditions and transmit their beliefs to the foreigners
as well
. Which promotes acceptance and
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helps
with the integration of the world.

However
,
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Tourism
has
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some
disadvantages to it.
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Many
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tourist
receiving
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countries
suffer from hosting
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tourists
; as they crowd the cities and litter the environments.
Furthermore
,
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many
of the foreigners don't know the
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local
laws and traditions which can lead to several problems, whether with the authorities or with the
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local
inhabitants.
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Some of the
developing
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countries
can't afford the costs that
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come
with tourism-transportation, infrastructure, services.
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.
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.
Etc. -And
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end
up with heavy burdens to provide such accommodations. Which
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makes
us question if the perks of
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tourism
outweigh its costs?

In conclusion
,
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tourism
is an enormous source of benefits and
is considered
to be the main source of living for
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many
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people
. Yes, it has disadvantages like anything in the world,
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but
such disadvantages aren't a hinder and could
be dealt
with.
Therefore
, it remains beneficial, with lots of advantages and opportunities to offer.
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IELTS essay Bus Service Elimination PlannedThe university has decided to discontinue its free bus service for students. The reason given for this decision is that few students ride the buses and the buses are expensive to operate. Currently, the buses run from the ce v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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