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A full time university student needs to spend time on studying but it is essential to get involved in other activities To what extent to you agree or disagree v.1

A full time university student needs to spend time on studying but it is essential to get involved in other activities 1
In the past, factories were often built in close proximity to city areas as the lack of transportation forbade people to do otherwise. However, this is not exactly the case today, when industries and businesses are moving from municipal and into countryside areas in flocks. This essay will elaborate on both positive and negative effects of this trend. On the one hand, firstly, this movement makes perfect environmental sense. Due to industrial activities, residents of many cities around the world are still breathing in air and consume water dirty enough to cause numerous health diseases. Therefore, moving businesses out of the cities will rid human and other species of pollution. A further advantage of this trend is reducing the gap between the rich and the poor in a country, as countryside dwellers can opt to work in factories to higher pay, rather than agricultural work. This will eventually bring about peace and harmony to society. On the other hand, doing business in the countryside also represents some notable drawbacks. To begin with, skilled workers are a rarity in rural areas. Most of people living in small towns and villages do not receive sufficient education to undertake intellectual jobs. What is also disadvantageous is based in regional areas, companies risk distancing themselves further from their customers, their suppliers and other partners in their business transactions, which can weaken their profitability. In conclusion, moving business from cities to rural areas can be a smart decision. However, there are disadvantages that should be weighed carefully against the advantages.
In the past, factories were
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often
built in
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close proximity
to city
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areas
as the lack of transportation forbade
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people
to do
otherwise
.
However
, this is not exactly the case
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today
, when industries and
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businesses
are moving from municipal and into countryside
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areas
in flocks. This essay will elaborate on both
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positive
and
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negative
effects of this trend.

On the one hand,
firstly
, this movement
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makes
perfect environmental sense. Due to industrial activities, residents of
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many
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cities
around the world are
still
breathing in air and consume water dirty
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enough
to cause numerous health diseases.
Therefore
, moving
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businesses
out of the
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cities
will
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rid
human and other species of pollution. A
further
advantage of this trend is reducing the gap between the rich and the poor in a country, as countryside dwellers can opt to work in factories to higher pay,
rather
than agricultural work. This will
eventually
bring about peace and harmony to society.

On the other hand
, doing
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business
in the countryside
also
represents
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some
notable drawbacks. To
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begin
with, skilled workers are a rarity in rural
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areas
. Most of
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people
living in
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small
towns and villages do not receive sufficient education to undertake intellectual jobs. What is
also
disadvantageous
is based
in regional
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areas
,
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companies
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risk
distancing themselves
further
from their customers, their suppliers and other partners in their
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business
transactions, which can weaken their profitability.

In conclusion
, moving
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business
from
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cities
to rural
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areas
can be a smart decision.
However
, there are disadvantages that should
be weighed
carefully
against the advantages.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A full time university student needs to spend time on studying but it is essential to get involved in other activities 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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