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Full-time university students need to spend a lot of time studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Full-time university students need to spend a lot of time studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. v. 1
There is no doubt that college students studying is most important. While some people believe that studying is important, so most of the time spend in studying, others argue that they have to involve in other activities. In this easy, I tend to agree with former argument. Firstly, full-time university students must spend more time for studying. For example, students need to prepare for the exams, due to all the exams should be in bookish knowledge. If you give correct or proper answers all the exams from the college books. As a result, If you completed the educational institution studies, then you will get a good job and will get more value from the society. Suppose if you failed in the university final examinations, you will lose your career. Secondly, nowadays everything is important, if you concentrate or more time spend in studying, you cannot gain social knowledge and how to lead to your life in the society. For example, if you do not know how to travel or how to interact with new people, it is disadvantage where your career starts. You should know how to mingle with outside of the world. As a result, you need to face some social issues as well as your behavioural issues in the society. In the conclusion, full-time students need to focus on their studies, because it is very important to get into in future life, as well as a need to improve other activities like socialization, behaviour with others, and strong skills for leading a life. I would agree the studies are important, but also interpersonal skills and leading the life skill very important.
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is most
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. While
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some
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people
believe that
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studying
is
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important
,
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so
most of the time spend in
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studying
, others argue that they
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have to
involve in
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other
activities. In this easy, I tend to
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agree
with former argument.

Firstly
, full-time university
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students
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must
spend more time for
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.
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,
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students
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need
to prepare for the exams, due to all the exams should be in bookish knowledge. If you give correct or proper answers all the exams from the college books.
As a result
, If you completed the educational institution studies, then you will
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get
a
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good
job and will
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get
more value from the society. Suppose if you failed in the university final examinations, you will lose your career.

Secondly
, nowadays everything is
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important
, if you concentrate or more time spend in
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studying
, you cannot gain social knowledge and how to lead to your
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life
in the society.
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, if you do not know how to travel or how to interact with new
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people
, it is disadvantage where your career
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starts
. You should know how to mingle with
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outside of
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to face
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some
social issues
as well
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behavioural
issues in the society.

In the conclusion, full-time
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it is
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into in future
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life
,
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improve
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other
activities like socialization,
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behaviour
with others, and strong
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skills
for leading a
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life
. I would
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agree
the studies are
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,
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also
interpersonal
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and leading the
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very
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IELTS essay Full-time university students need to spend a lot of time studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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