Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Nowadays, full-time university student tend to focus on their studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Nowadays, full-time university student tend to focus on their studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. v. 1
As different countries speak differently, it is widely suggested to have one language where every country will follow, in order to eliminate misunderstanding and alienation. In my opinion, I believe that it will be highly beneficial to have one linguistic across all countries, which will be discussed further in the essay below. To start with, having one communication across the globe will eliminate language barrier between one country to another. Confusion due to grammar, vocabulary or word structure will be removed, as the knowledge to communicate is understood by everyone. For instance, when English was chosen to be the ‘Global Language’, nations all over the world decided to learn it as a second language, to communicate with people from abroad easily. This, currently, has benefited mostly to travellers, since they are able to visit overseas by using only English, without having to learn the other country’s language. Additionally, speaking one native tongue will increase cooperation, since governments and companies worldwide can effortlessly do trades or transactions. This is because, people who talk in the same language generally have more trust to do work with each other. As an example, in 2018, ‘The Economist’ magazine stated that the highest trading in the world was between UK and US, where they exchanged businesses that produced sales more than $11billion annually. Both countries are fluent in English, which caused trading went clearly. In conclusion, creating a multinational language that will be used around the world will reduce barrier and increase trust, which in my opinion, will eventually bring benefit to everyone. Ultimately, I do approve that we, people on earth, should agree to have 1 language for everybody to follow and speak.
As
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
speak
differently
, it is
widely
The verb 'suggested' is used with the gerund form: "suggested having".
suggested to have
one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
where every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
will follow, in order to eliminate misunderstanding and alienation. In my opinion, I believe that it will be
highly
beneficial to have one linguistic across all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
, which will
be discussed
further
in the essay below.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with, having one communication across the globe will eliminate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
barrier between one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
to another. Confusion due to grammar, vocabulary or word structure will
be removed
, as the knowledge to communicate
is understood
by everyone.
For instance
, when English
was chosen
to be the ‘Global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Language’
, nations all over the world decided to learn it as a second
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
, to communicate with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from abroad
easily
. This,
currently
, has benefited
mostly
to
Possible spelling mistake found.
travellers
, since they are able to visit overseas by using
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
English, without having to learn the other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country’s
language.

Additionally
, speaking one native tongue will increase cooperation, since
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
worldwide can
effortlessly
do trades or transactions. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who talk in the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
generally
have more trust to do work with each other. As an example, in 2018, ‘The Economist’ magazine stated that the highest trading in the world was between UK and US, where they exchanged businesses that produced sales more than $11billion
annually
. Both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
are fluent in English, which caused trading went
clearly
.

In conclusion
, creating a multinational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
that will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
around the world will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
barrier and increase trust, which in my opinion, will
eventually
bring benefit to everyone.
Ultimately
, I do approve that we,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
on earth, should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to have 1
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
for everybody to follow and speak.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Nowadays, full-time university student tend to focus on their studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts