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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in UK in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in UK in 2010
It is true that people do not treat environmental problems seriously, even though scientific research gives us a lot of warnings and they still waste energy in their everyday life. There are several reasons and I am sure governments and the media can help solve these problems. Some people think that it is unrealistic to protect the environment in this year and age, so they prefer just focusing on the current benefits regardless of the problems that will happen in the future. While scientists have found many signs that tell us the environmental issues are becoming worse than before, such as more extreme weather (like famine, drought, hurricane), the melting glacier and so on. But those things only happen in some areas where few people have lived or travelled. They do not believe they can do something good to solve those problems which are not related to their current lives. For example, people who live in the mainland can not take the melting glacier problem seriously because it does not have any effect on their living areas. Because of the reasons mentioned before, local residents do not have the awareness to protect the environment, especially without enough information about the importance of their actions. Due to less awareness campaigns by the government and media, people cannot get much information about how serious those environmental problems are in our lives and what they can do to help protect the environment. For example, electrical energy is used wastefully and the shortage of electricity will be a big problem for our living. But if everyone can turn off the light when leaving the room, it will bring a huge change. I believe that governments and the media can do more things do help people have a better understanding about those environmental problems in our daily life and with more polices and awareness campaigns people can make every effort to improve the environment. For example, governments can increase the tax on driving cars and pose laws on tobacco consumption. The media can make more environmental programs to convey related issues to make sure everyone realise individual's action means a lot. For example, the public service advertisement can show people how to save water and use more renewable energy. In conclusion, it is realistic to convince people realise the importance of environmental problems in our daily life and make every effort to protect the environment with the help of governments and the media.
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people
do not treat
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environmental
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problems
seriously
,
even though
scientific research gives us
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a lot of
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warnings and
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still
waste energy in their everyday life. There are several
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reasons and
I am sure
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governments
and the
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media
can
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help
solve these problems.

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Some
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people
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think
that it is unrealistic to
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protect
the
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environment
in this year and age,
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so
they prefer
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just
focusing on the
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current
benefits regardless of the
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problems
that will happen in the future. While scientists have found
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many
signs that
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tell
us the
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environmental
issues are becoming worse than
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before
, such as more extreme weather (like famine, drought, hurricane), the melting glacier and
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so
on.
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But
those things
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only
happen in
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some
areas where few
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people
have
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lived
or travelled. They do not believe they can do something
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good
to solve those
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problems
which are not related to their
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current
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lives
. For
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example
,
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people
who
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live
in the mainland can not take the melting glacier
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problem
seriously
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because
it does not have any effect on their living areas.

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Because
of the reasons mentioned
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before
, local residents do not have the awareness to
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protect
the
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environment
,
especially
without
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enough
information about the importance of their actions. Due to less awareness campaigns by the
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government
and
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media
,
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people
cannot
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get
much information about how serious those
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environmental
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problems
are in our
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lives
and what they can do to
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help
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protect
the
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environment
. For
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example
, electrical energy is
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used
wastefully
and the shortage of electricity will be a
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big
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problem
for our living.
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But
if everyone can turn off the light when leaving the room, it will bring a huge
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change
.

I believe that
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governments
and the
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media
can do more things do
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help
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people
have a better understanding about those
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environmental
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problems
in our daily life and with more polices and awareness campaigns
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people
can
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make
every effort to
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improve
the
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environment
. For
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example
,
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governments
can increase the tax on driving cars and pose laws on tobacco consumption. The
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media
can
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make
more
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environmental
programs to convey related issues to
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make
sure everyone
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realise
individual's action means a lot. For
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example
, the public service advertisement can
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show
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people
how to save water and
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use
more renewable energy.

In conclusion
, it is realistic to convince
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people
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realise
the importance of
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environmental
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problems
in our daily life and
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make
every effort to
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protect
the
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environment
with the
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help
of
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governments
and the
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media
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in UK in 2010

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
408 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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