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Nowadays food travels thousands of miles before reaching consumers. It affects the agriculture and economy of the destination country, and for this reason, people should prefer food produced by local farmers. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include examples from your experience. v.1

Nowadays food travels thousands of miles before reaching consumers. It affects the agriculture and economy of the destination country, and for this reason, people should prefer food produced by local farmers. v. 1
With globalization, food from one country is exported to other countries. Some people think that this impacts the local economy since imported food is often cheap and it leads to the drain of wealth outside the country. I agree with this view. Some countries have developed food as an industry and this enables them to produce it at a very cheap price. When this food is exported to countries whose farmers are not competent, it leads to lesser consumption of local food. As a result, local farmers suffer losses and, in some cases, commit suicide. For instance, in the United States, productivity of land, availability of machines, high quality seeds and farms of large size have enabled the production of cheap wheat. When this wheat is exported to countries like India, the local farmers lose money as they do not have the same facilities. This has led to farm distress in India. Moreover, the import of foreign food leads to higher income for foreigners at the expense of local people. When a country purchases foreign food, it pays the country’s money to others. This leads to the drain of weath which could have been used for numerous productive purposes in the local economy. China faced this situation in 1960s when it imported millions of tonnes of wheat and rice from western countries. This cost the local economy more than 100 million dollars and thousands of local jobs. This moneey could have been used to develop infrastructure such as irrigation canals. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the local economy suffers in terms of loss of wealth and jobs when a country imports food from others. Every country should encourage the consumption of local farm produce only.
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economy
since imported
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is
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and it leads to the drain of wealth outside the
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. I
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agree
with this view.

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have developed
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as an industry and this enables them to produce it at a
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cheap
price. When this
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is exported
to
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countries
whose farmers are not competent, it leads to lesser consumption of
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local
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food
.
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,
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local
farmers suffer losses and, in
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some
cases, commit suicide.
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, in the United States, productivity of land, availability of machines, high quality seeds and farms of large size have enabled the production of
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cheap
wheat. When this wheat
is exported
to
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countries
like India, the
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local
farmers lose money as they do not have the same facilities. This has led to farm distress in India.

Moreover
, the import of foreign
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food
leads to higher income for foreigners at the expense of
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local
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people
. When a
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country
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purchases
foreign
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food
, it pays the
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country’s
money to others. This leads to the drain of
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which could have been
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used
for numerous productive purposes in the
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economy
. China faced this situation
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in 1960s
when it imported millions of tonnes of wheat and rice from western
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countries
. This cost the
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local
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economy
more than 100 million dollars and thousands of
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local
jobs. This
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could have been
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used
to develop infrastructure such as irrigation canals.

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, I
strongly
believe that the
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local
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economy
suffers in terms of loss of wealth and jobs when a
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country
imports
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food
from others. Every
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country
should encourage the consumption of
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local
farm produce
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IELTS essay Nowadays food travels thousands of miles before reaching consumers. It affects the agriculture and economy of the destination country, and for this reason, people should prefer food produced by local farmers. v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
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