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Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people ate only the local food produced by farmers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people ate only the local food produced by farmers. v. 3
With a growing network of supermarkets, consumers can find a large variety of edibles imported from various parts of the world. There are people who opine that consuming only locally grown food is beneficial for the environment and the economy. I do agree with this view to a certain extent. However, if people limit themselves to locally produced food, they will have very few options. The environmental problem is a highly debated topic these days. Huge amounts of fossil fuels are burnt during transportation of food to distant places, therefore, causing a significant damage to the global environment. Nonetheless, it can be diminished by a large amount if people preferred to consume locally produced eatables. Another benefit of this could be the availability of more job opportunities, which consequently increase the country’s monetary growth. For instance, demand for locally grown vegetables could encourage farmers to recruit more people in order to increase crop yield. Hence, switching to local products could prove beneficial to the environment and the economy. Nevertheless, eating only local dietaries is not a viable option. Especially in areas where crop production is very low and limited to few varieties. Furthermore, limiting to locally grown products may leave us in the dark in terms of various cultures and their dishes. For example, a master chef is expected to cook various cuisines from all corners of the globe, which is highly impossible if they restrict themselves to local ingredients. Hence, the people should be open to imported foodstuff, at least from a few different places. In conclusion, if people give preference to locally produced food it is beneficial for environment and economy. Although, in my opinion, it is not a viable option as it would seriously limit the food choices people have.
With a growing network of supermarkets, consumers can find a large variety of edibles imported from various parts of the world. There are
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people
who opine that consuming
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only
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locally
grown
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food
is beneficial for the
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environment
and the economy. I do
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agree
with this view to a certain extent.
However
, if
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people
limit themselves to
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locally
produced
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food
, they will have
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very
few options.

The environmental problem is a
highly
debated topic these days. Huge amounts of fossil fuels
are burnt
during transportation of
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food
to distant places,
therefore
, causing
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a significant damage
to the global
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environment
. Nonetheless, it can
be diminished
by a large amount if
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people
preferred to consume
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
locally
produced eatables. Another benefit of this could be the availability of more job opportunities, which
consequently
increase the country’s monetary growth.
For instance
, demand for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
locally
grown vegetables could encourage farmers to recruit more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in order to increase crop yield.
Hence
, switching to local products could prove beneficial to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and the economy.

Nevertheless
, eating
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only
local dietaries is not a viable option.
Especially
in areas where crop production is
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very
low and limited
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to
few varieties.
Furthermore
, limiting to
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locally
grown products may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
us in the dark in terms of various cultures and their dishes.
For example
, a master chef is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to cook various cuisines from all corners of the globe, which is
highly
impossible if they restrict themselves to local ingredients.
Hence
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should be open to imported foodstuff, at least from a few
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
places.

In conclusion
, if
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people
give preference to
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locally
produced
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food
it is beneficial for
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environment
and economy. Although, in my opinion, it is not a viable option as it would
seriously
limit the
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food
choices
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people
have.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people ate only the local food produced by farmers. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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