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Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers. v. 4
food import and export are two important facts that governments, producers, and consumpters are faced with, in the recent ages. A significant group of people believes that everybody in society should buy and use local products to improving economy of the country, supporting from local farmers and businesses, and protecting the environment. In the following paragraphs, I intend to dive into the advantages of this idea is more than disadvantages. At first, using local products help to employment and decrease the rate of jobless in local areas. It is clear that buying imported food can be harmful for internal farmers with declining their income and changing their job happened easily. For example, if iran farmers produced banana, it is better than iranian people consumpt domestic bananas instead of indian bananas. By and large, the cost of local products is dramatically less than foreign products. It is a good illustration that omitting transportation costs is a clear benefit for human beings. Also, it can help to economy growth in the wide range. For instance, the money that will save deleting imported foods, can spend on health and education. Finally, environment protection is another inspect of supporting local farmers and businesses. For example, if unnecessary transportation avoid, polution will have a went downtrend. On the other hand, loss of local products gradually reduced. To put in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, it is clear to support local farmers and local businesses needs of attention according to the mentioned reasons; meanwhile, it can have some advantages.
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food
import and export are two
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facts that
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governments
, producers, and
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consumpters
are faced
with, in the recent ages. A significant group of
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people
believes that everybody in society should
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buy
and
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use
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local
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products
to improving economy of the country, supporting from
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local
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farmers
and businesses, and protecting the environment. In the following paragraphs, I intend to dive into the advantages of this
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idea
is more than disadvantages.

At
first
, using
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local
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products
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help
to employment and decrease the rate of jobless in
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local
areas. It is
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clear
that buying imported food can be harmful for internal
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farmers
with declining their income and changing their job happened
easily
.
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, if
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iran
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farmers
produced banana, it is better than
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iranian
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people
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consumpt
domestic bananas
instead
of
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indian
bananas.

By and large, the cost of
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local
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products
is
dramatically
less than foreign
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products
. It is a
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good
illustration that omitting transportation costs is a
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clear
benefit for human beings.
Also
, it can
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help
to economy growth in the wide range.
For instance
, the money that will save deleting imported foods, can spend on health and education.

Finally
, environment protection is another inspect of supporting
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local
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farmers
and businesses.
For example
, if unnecessary transportation avoid,
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polution
will have a went downtrend.
On the other hand
, loss of
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local
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products
gradually
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reduced
. To put in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, it is
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clear
to support
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local
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farmers
and
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local
businesses needs of attention according to the mentioned reasons; meanwhile, it can have
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some
advantages.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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