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Nowadays families move to different countries for work. Some people think it has a negative effect on children, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Nowadays families move to different countries for work. Some people think it has a negative effect on children, while others disagree. v. 3
Researchers say that our personality & accomplishment are heavily influenced by our characteristics rather than whatever we experienced in our lifetime. In my opinion, experience plays a vital role to build up our own identity than the others. Our life consists of so many things which play a vital role in changing the passage of our daily routine. Instinct is obviously one of them. Since our birth, it has controlled us a lot. One clear example is the behaviour of us during our childhood. We all have behaved in a different way when we were at a very early age. Day by day the situation changed & we got more matured than we were in our infancy, but whatever we had in our babyhood hardly affected us in different phases of our life. On the other hand, within time, we have gained lots of knowledge which has a major impact on us. There are always ups & downs in our life. Variation of conditions has taught us a lot of lessons which helped us to improve ourself. Moreover, it is considered in the modern world that the person who is more experienced can bring much more development in his personal life. For example, whenever we experience something either in our office or at home from other people, that helps us to know new things. Due to that, we make ourselves prepared for further challenges. If we want to prosper more, experiencing new things in this way plays the most crucial part here. That's why it assists a lot to the progress as well as the identity of one. To conclude, it can easily be said that there are obviously some worth mentioning effects of characteristics on our personality & advancement. But alongside that, experience plays a much more valuable role to make us true person & assists us to go further to achieve success.
Researchers say that our personality & accomplishment are
heavily
influenced by our characteristics
rather
than whatever we experienced in our lifetime. In my opinion, experience
plays
a vital role to build up our
own
identity than the others.

Our life consists of
so
many
things which
play
a vital role in changing the passage of our daily routine. Instinct is
obviously
one of them. Since our birth, it has controlled us a
lot
. One
clear
example is the
behaviour
of us during our childhood. We all have behaved in a
different
way when we were at a
very
early age. Day by day the situation
changed
& we
got
more matured than we were in our infancy,
but
whatever we had in our babyhood hardly
affected
us in
different
phases of our life.

On the other hand
, within time, we have gained
lots
of knowledge which has a major impact on us. There are always ups & downs in our life. Variation of conditions has taught us a
lot
of lessons which
helped
us to
improve
ourself
.
Moreover
, it
is considered
in the modern world that the person who is more experienced can bring much more development in his personal life.
For example
, whenever we experience something either in our office or at home from other
people
, that
helps
us to know new things. Due to that, we
make
ourselves prepared for
further
challenges. If we want to prosper more, experiencing new things in this way
plays
the most crucial part here. That's why it assists a
lot
to the progress
as well
as the identity of one.

To conclude
, it can
easily
be said
that there are
obviously
some
worth mentioning effects of characteristics on our personality & advancement.
But
alongside that, experience
plays
a much more valuable role to
make
us true person & assists us to go
further
to achieve success.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays families move to different countries for work. Some people think it has a negative effect on children, while others disagree. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7.5
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