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Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - offer to find somewhere to stay- give advice about what to do- give information about what clothes to bringWrite at least 150 words. v.6

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - offer to find somewhere to stay- give advice about what to do- give information about what clothes to bring v. 6
Wearing fashionable outfits is becoming a trend nowadays. In my opinion, people wear these to improve their image in the public. This essay will discuss that, this is a good trend because they feel confident among friends and relatives, and it shows they came from the nice family. To begin with, why people wear valuable clothes. I believe that, society judges an individual from their outfits. If a person wear a nice costume they respect them, and assume that he belongs to a good family. For example, according to a survey in India, the majority of people agree that, they would not mind to talk, if a person looks good and wears a suit as compared to people who wears a cheap clothes. In my opinion, wearing smart attire is a positive development. Firstly, smart outfit can boost confidence. Therefore, an individual feels positive among friends and relatives, if they look smart. Secondly, good looking clothes are human's first impression for the public. Wearing valuable costume shows to society that, the person comes from a respected family. To illustrate with an example, according to a survey from The Harvard University, the majority of people agree that they feel confident among others if they looks good. Thus, fashionable attire is the best development of civilization. To conclude, Wearing a valuable dress becomes the trend now. People do this to improve their standard in public. I believe this is a positive development, as it shows they come from the upper class and feel satisfactory among society.
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improve
their image in the public. This essay will discuss that, this is a
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good
trend
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they
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feel
confident among friends and relatives, and it
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they came from the nice family.

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with, why
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people
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wear
valuable clothes. I believe that, society judges an individual from their outfits. If a person
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wear
a nice costume they respect them, and assume that he belongs to a
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good
family.
For example
, according to a survey in India, the majority of
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people
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agree
that, they would not mind to talk, if a person looks
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good
and
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wears
a suit as compared to
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people
who
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wears
a
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cheap
clothes.

In my opinion, wearing smart attire is a
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positive
development.
Firstly
, smart outfit can boost confidence.
Therefore
, an individual
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feels
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positive
among friends and relatives, if they look smart.
Secondly
,
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good looking
clothes are human's
first
impression for the public. Wearing valuable costume
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shows
to society that, the person
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comes
from a respected family. To illustrate with an example, according to a survey from The Harvard University, the majority of
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people
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agree
that they
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feel
confident among others if they
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looks
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good
.

Thus
, fashionable attire is the best development of civilization.

To conclude
, Wearing a valuable dress becomes the trend
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now
.
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People
do this to
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improve
their standard in public. I believe this is a
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positive
development, as it
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shows
they
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come
from the upper
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class
and
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feel
satisfactory among society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - offer to find somewhere to stay- give advice about what to do- give information about what clothes to bring v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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