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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.15

Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 15
Consumer goods are ubiquitous, and it's impossible to visualize life without them. From brushing our teeth to sleeping at night, every human activity requires them. What would our lives be like without them? The first scenario would be that of their unavailability at the local store. Imagine having to go to the soap factory or its warehouse, to have to buy soap that I need in my home every day. Even if I decide to stock my home on a monthly basis, I would still have to travel all the way to the factory and back once in a month, which is too much trouble for something so little as soap. I would have to repeat this for all the items that I need, with no time for any other productive activity. Let's say that availability is not a problem, but the only way I could buy them was in bulk. What would I do with bucket loads of milk? Where would I store them? What about the other items I need? Will I be able to find enough space to store my supplies and live comfortably as well? Especially as housing is so expensive - anywhere in the world. Hence, packaged goods with the choice to buy either in bulk or individually are such a boon. In conclusion, if I want to focus on doing things that I enjoy and make money to indulge in them, then I can't do without retail products. Just on the two counts described above, it's easy to see why the benefits of consumables have served to make them an integral part of our life. Eventually, one hopes that their presentation will prove beneficial to the environment too.
Consumer
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goods
are ubiquitous, and it's impossible to visualize life without them. From brushing our teeth to sleeping at night, every human activity requires them. What would our
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lives
be like without them?

The
first
scenario would be that of their unavailability at the local store. Imagine having to go to the soap factory or its warehouse, to
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have to
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buy
soap that I need in my home every day. Even if I decide to stock my home on a monthly basis, I would
still
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have to
travel all the way to the factory and back once in a month, which is too much trouble for something
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so
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little
as soap. I would
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have to
repeat this for all the items that I need, with no time for any other productive activity.

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Let
's say that availability is not a problem,
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but
the
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only
way I could
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buy
them was in bulk. What would I do with bucket loads of milk? Where would I store them? What about the other items I need? Will I be able to find
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enough
space to store my supplies and
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live
comfortably
as well
?
Especially
as housing is
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so
expensive
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anywhere in the world.
Hence
, packaged
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goods
with the choice to
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buy
either in bulk or
individually
are such a boon.

In conclusion
, if I want to focus on doing things that I enjoy and
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make
money to indulge in them, then I can't do without retail products.
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Just
on the two counts
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described
above, it's easy to
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see
why the benefits of consumables have served to
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make
them an integral part of our life.
Eventually
, one hopes that their presentation will prove beneficial to the environment too.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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