The revolutionary advancements in the modern technology have endowed people with substantial resources for their survival in the best possible way. The variety of facilities enable the people to adopt best possible opportunities in their life. However, there are sections of society which even don't have the basic necessities of life. I partially agree with this statement.
To begin with, with the advancement in preservatives, it is possible to have any particular type of food throughout the year without having to wait for a particular season in which the food was grown. Secondly, with the improvements in the transport system, it is now possible to book tickets online rather than going to the railway station for booking the tickets. With the recent advancements, it is possible now to check the running status of any train through the use of internet enabled devices such as mobile and laptops. Finally, with the latest inventions in the healthcare, it is possible to treat identify and treat deadly diseases.
There is, however unequal distribution of the positive impact of technology. In many underdeveloped nations people are lacking basic amenities like food, transport and healthcare. According to WHO survey, almost 50% population does not have clean drinking water and 35% living substandard life. Job opportunities are limited to developed countries only as a result of which undeveloped countries are devoid of these advantages.
To conclude, although recent breakthroughs in the modern technology make the life easier for people in developed countries, but undeveloped nations are deprived of these technological advancements as they still don't have the basic necessities.
The revolutionary
advancements
in the modern technology have endowed
people
with substantial resources for their survival in the best
possible
way. The variety of facilities
enable
the
people
to
adopt best
possible
opportunities in their
life
.
However
, there are sections of society which even don't have the
basic necessities
of
life
. I
partially
agree
with this statement.
To
begin
with, with the
advancement
in preservatives, it is
possible
to have any particular type of food throughout the year without having to wait for a particular season in which the food
was grown
.
Secondly
, with the improvements in the transport system, it is
now
possible
to book tickets online
rather
than going to the railway station for booking the tickets. With the recent
advancements
, it is
possible
now
to
check
the running status of any train through the
use
of internet enabled devices such as mobile and laptops.
Finally
, with the latest inventions in the healthcare, it is
possible
to treat identify and treat deadly diseases.
There is,
however
unequal distribution of the
positive
impact of technology. In
many
underdeveloped nations
people
are lacking basic amenities like food, transport and healthcare. According to WHO survey, almost 50% population does not have clean drinking water and 35% living substandard
life
. Job opportunities
are limited
to
developed countries
only
as a result
of which undeveloped countries are devoid of these advantages.
To conclude
, although recent breakthroughs in the modern technology
make
the
life
easier for
people
in
developed countries
,
but
undeveloped nations
are deprived
of these technological
advancements
as they
still
don't have the
basic necessities
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes