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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.266

Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 266
Global Warming is a big concern today. There are several factors that are causing Global Warming to rise at the extent level. Some of them are, burning plastics, forests, smoke emitting from vehicles. However, the one which has witnessed, which could cause more harm than the others is vehicles and I totally agree with this statement that vehicles are the major reason for an increase in Global Warming. First, emission of hazardous gases, while vehicles are in motion. When the fuels of these vehicles burn, it leaves out any harmful gases, which we call the greenhouse gases like: methane, carbon dioxide etc. These gases, in turn, deplete the ozone layer of the earth, due to which, direct rays of the sunlight come to our planet and raise the temperature of the our planet earth. A report shows that seventy percent of the greenhouse gases are caused due to a moving vehicle. So, as long as more cars, bikes or buses, are in a moving state, it will continue to affect our environment in an adverse form like Global Warming. Second, more use of private transport rather than public transport, is also one of the reasons of more number of fuels burning each day and affecting our environment every day. If every person uses his own car for travelling on the daily basis then it will require an equal proportion of cars as human beings. Which means the extensive burning of the fossil fuels like petrol and again will raise the level of Glogal Warming. In fact, a data taken by automobile industry show that there has been a thirty percent increment seen by customers buying these vehicles. In conclusion, As the number of people are looking to buy these vehicles every year, the number of manufacturing have been done without considering the fact that how badly it can affect our planet in a possibly severe way. So, if more number of the vehicles run on the road every year, it will not decline the level of the Global warming.
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Global
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Warming
is a
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big
concern
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today
. There are several factors that are causing
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Global
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Warming
to rise at the extent level.
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Some
of them are, burning plastics, forests, smoke emitting from
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vehicles
.
However
, the one which has witnessed, which could cause more harm than the others is
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vehicles
and I
totally
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agree
with this statement that
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vehicles
are the major reason for an increase in
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Global
Warming.

First
, emission of hazardous
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gases
, while
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vehicles
are in motion. When the fuels of these
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vehicles
burn, it
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leaves
out any harmful
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gases
, which we call the greenhouse
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gases
like: methane, carbon dioxide etc. These
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gases
, in turn, deplete the ozone layer of the earth, due to which, direct rays of the sunlight
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come
to our planet and raise the temperature of
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earth. A report
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shows
that seventy percent of the greenhouse
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gases
are caused
due to a moving
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vehicle
.
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So
, as long as more cars, bikes or buses, are in a moving state, it will continue to affect our environment in an adverse form like
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Global
Warming.

Second, more
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use
of private transport
rather
than public transport, is
also
one of the reasons of more
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number
of fuels burning each day and affecting our environment every day. If every person
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uses
his
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own
car for travelling on the daily basis then it will require an equal proportion of cars as human beings. Which means the extensive burning of the fossil fuels like petrol and again will raise the level of
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Glogal
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Warming
. In fact, a data taken by automobile industry
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show
that there has been a thirty percent increment
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seen
by customers buying these vehicles.

In conclusion
, As the
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number
of
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people
are looking to
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buy
these
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vehicles
every year, the
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number
of manufacturing have
been done
without considering the fact that how
badly
it can affect our planet in a
possibly
severe way.
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, if more
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number
of the
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vehicles
run on the road every year, it will not decline the level of the
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Global
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warming
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 266

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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