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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion. Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of thi v.2

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion. Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. 2
computer become the need of today' s generation, our modern education is based on computer-assisted studies that develop the skills of students while other people believe that it has a negative impact on the children. This is the era of computer as it is being used in every organisation, without its assistance it would be terrible for people to perform work with ease.  possessing the knowledge of computer is very essential for the development of students and also, the plethora of opportunities are available in the market for the candidates who possess the required computer skills. computers make the task easy and now become a substantial part of today' s generation life. However, some people argue that it leads to negative impact means, today' s generation is only fit mentally correspondingly become weak physically as well. They are able to perform computer-assisted task easily but also it leads to negative consequences on the health of children. They get to know every information in seconds whether it is useful or not. children engage most of the time with this device instead of spending fruitful time with their families. In my opinion and as per the demand of today' s culture, computer is a valuable resource and therefore, should be the part of the current education system. besides this, the pros and cons of its usage should also be taught in school, so that effective use of computer can be carried out by the students. to conclude, there are good arguments for and against computer-based education, schools are responsible to provide awareness for the effective use of computer so that it leads to a positive impact on education.
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computer
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today&
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education
is based
on computer-assisted studies that develop the
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skills
of students while other
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people
believe that it has a
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negative
impact on the children.

This is the era of computer as it is being
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used
in every
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organisation
, without its assistance it would be terrible for
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people
to perform work with
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ease
.  
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possessing
the knowledge of computer is
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very
essential for the development of students and
also
, the plethora of opportunities are available in the market for the candidates who possess the required computer
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skills
.
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computers
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make
the task easy and
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now
become a substantial part of
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today&
#039; s generation life.

However
,
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some
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people
argue that it leads to
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negative
impact means,
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today&
#039; s generation is
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only
fit mentally
correspondingly
become weak
physically
as well
.

They are able to perform computer-assisted task
easily
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but
also
it leads to
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negative
consequences on the health of children. They
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get
to know every information in seconds whether it is useful or not.
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children
engage most of the time with this device
instead
of spending fruitful time with their families.

In my opinion and as per the demand of
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today&
#039; s culture, computer is a valuable resource and
therefore
, should be the part of the
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current
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education
system.

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besides
this, the pros and cons of its usage should
also
be taught
in school,
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so
that effective
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use
of computer can
be carried
out by the students.

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to
conclude, there are
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good
arguments for and against computer-based
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education
, schools are responsible to provide awareness for the effective
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use
of computer
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so
that it leads to a
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positive
impact on
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education
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion. Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. 2

Essay
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7 paragraphs
274 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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