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Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from y v.2

Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? 2
The demand for houses has increased rapidly these days, due to the significant growth of the world population. Some people think that it is better for property developers to build more houses in existing cities, while others believe that it would be better to build new areas. The following essay will discuss both arguments in details. It is a fact that the world population has grown rapidly nowadays which increased the demand for housing. It is believed that building more houses in the existing town is better than to expand to new areas. As most workplaces are located in cities surrounding, it would be better for residents to have accommodation which is located near to their work. However, many people do not realise that building more properties in the town means that the city would become denser and traffic congestion would become worst. As a result, air pollution become worst and it distracts the health condition of the residents. On the other hand, developing new housing areas bring a lot of benefits for the people. Firstly, new towns or cities have a lower property price than those who are located in the city centre, therefore more people could own a house. Secondly, as some of the cities' people move to new towns, it would gradually reduce the density, air pollution and traffic problems in the cities themselves. Thirdly, by developing rural areas, it would develop the economic growth of the rural areas themselves, as there will be new commercial areas and new workplaces as well. In conclusion, it is obvious that the demand for properties has risen due to the increase of the world population. To cope with the issue, people could build more houses in existing cities or develop new towns. I personally believe that building and developing new areas is better than building new houses in the existing towns.
The demand for
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houses
has increased
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these days, due to the significant growth of the world population.
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people
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think
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better
for
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property
developers to build more
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houses
in
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existing
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cities
, while others believe that it would be
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better
to build
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new
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areas
. The following essay will discuss both arguments in
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details
.

It is a fact that the world population has grown
rapidly
nowadays which increased the demand for housing. It
is believed
that
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building
more
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houses
in the
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existing
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town
is
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better
than to expand to
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new
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areas
. As most workplaces
are located
in
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cities
surrounding, it would be
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better
for residents to have accommodation which
is located
near to their work.
However
,
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many
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people
do not
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realise
that
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building
more
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properties
in the
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town
means that the city would become denser and traffic congestion would become worst.
As a result
, air pollution become worst and it distracts the health condition of the residents.

On the other hand
, developing
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new
housing
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areas
bring
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a lot of
benefits for the
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people
.
Firstly
,
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new
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towns
or
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cities
have a lower
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property
price than those who
are located
in the city
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centre
,
therefore
more
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people
could
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own
a
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house
.
Secondly
, as
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some of the
cities'
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people
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move
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new
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towns
, it would
gradually
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reduce
the density, air pollution and traffic problems in the
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cities
themselves.
Thirdly
, by developing rural
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areas
, it would develop the economic growth of the rural
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areas
themselves, as there will be
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new
commercial
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areas
and
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new
workplaces
as well
.

In conclusion
, it is obvious that the demand for
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properties
has risen due to the increase of the world population. To cope with the issue,
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people
could build more
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houses
in
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existing
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cities
or develop
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new
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towns
. I
personally
believe that
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building
and developing
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new
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areas
is
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better
than
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building
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new
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houses
in the
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existing
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towns
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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