Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should show their political and social view to students. v.754

Teachers should show their political and social view to students. v. 754
Teachers play a significant role in students' personality. They make an important contribution to the formation of students' attitudes toward life. This matter whether teachers had better say their mindsets to students or not is a controversial issue among individuals. Some people believe that teachers should not express their social and political beliefs, and I totally agree with this idea. I feel this way, for two main reasons that I will explain in the following essay. To begin with, speaking about political and social subjects diverts students' attention away from their lessons. Students cannot concentrate on their studying, therefore they cannot perform properly on the exams. For example, when I was in high school, I had a teacher who her focus was on political and social issues. She always spoke about her point of view toward the current circumstance in society and argued with students about political and social topics. These debates distracted me from my lessons and I could not learn any effective lesson in her class. Consequently, I took a bad score at the end of the semester. Additionally, those teachers who talk about their political and social viewpoint in the class do not give an opportunity for students to make a decision about these topics. Students are not mature enough to distinguish between wrong and right, and they will accept the teachers’ attitudes toward political and social subjects without any understanding about them. For instance, I had a teacher who was unsatisfied about the government’s policy toward teachers. She always showed her disagreement with the government. Therefore, many students were in contrast with the government regardless of any knowledge about the government’s principles. It is axiomatic that students’ belief will be changed by teachers explanation about different topics. All in all, by considering the mentioned reasons above, I think that teachers should not show their beliefs about political and social issues in the class. This is because of the fact that It reduces the students’ attention to their lessons, and also it takes the chance from students to have their thoughts about social and political matters.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Teachers
play a significant role in
Possible spelling mistake found.
students&
#039; personality. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
contribution to the formation of
Possible spelling mistake found.
students&
#039; attitudes toward life. This matter whether
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
had better say their mindsets to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
or not is a controversial issue among individuals.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
should not express their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
and political beliefs, and I
totally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
. I feel this way, for two main reasons that I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
in the following essay.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, speaking about political and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
subjects diverts
Possible spelling mistake found.
students&
#039; attention away from their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lessons
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Students
cannot concentrate on their studying,
therefore
they cannot perform
properly
on the exams.
For example
, when I was in high school, I had a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teacher
who her focus was on political and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
issues. She always spoke about her point of view toward the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
circumstance in society and argued with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
about political and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
topics. These debates distracted me from my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lessons
and I could not learn any effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lesson
in her
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
.
Consequently
, I took a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
score at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the semester.

Additionally
, those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
who talk about their political and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
viewpoint in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
do not give an opportunity for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a decision about these topics.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Students
are not mature
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to distinguish between
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
and right, and they will accept the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers’
attitudes toward political and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
subjects without any understanding about them.
For instance
, I had a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teacher
who
was unsatisfied
about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government’s
policy toward
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
. She always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
her disagreement with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
were
in contrast
with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
regardless of any knowledge about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government’s
principles. It is axiomatic that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students’
belief will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
by
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "teachers'" or "teacher's"?
teachers
explanation about
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
topics.

All in all, by considering the mentioned reasons above, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
should not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
their beliefs about political and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
issues in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. This is
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "because".
because of the fact that
It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students’
attention to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lessons
, and
also
it takes the chance from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to have their thoughts about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
and political matters.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Teachers should show their political and social view to students. v. 754

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts