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Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? v.5

Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? v. 5
Companies and organisations are enforcing their employees to wear a uniform. Is this helpful for the employer or employee is a debating topic, but here, I will describe some of my views regarding this topic either they are in favour or in opposite opinion of this view. First of all, a uniform presents itself as a dress code, no one feels superior or inferior to anyone and that provides an employee the comfort on their job, that ultimately leads to growing in profit. One of my friends was working as a grinding man in a company and he always complained about the feeling of being inferior to their employee, but when the company restricted all staffs to wear a uniform, it helped him to feel comfortable on his job place. Secondly, an employee wearing uniform has no tension of contaminating the dress and everybody feels easiness in their working and they work freely all kinds of work in the company. In spite of above-mentioned advantages, there are some disadvantages. Firstly, it is very difficult for an employee to wear the same dress over and over again, each one gets bored and try to avoid being in a uniform. This thing affects their performance on work. Secondly the man in uniform if having an allergy of specific dresses like cotton, he always feels bad and tries to avoid. Another reason, he always worries about their precious things that were kept in their dresses and ultimately he works partially hurt that leads to cut in the production. We find a way to tackle the situation by enforcing the uniform for the employees who are working in the field or on a technical machine, while uniform would not be necessary for peoples working in clerical jobs or those who are sitting on managerial positions.
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Companies
and
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organisations
are enforcing their
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employees
to wear a
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uniform
. Is this helpful for the employer or
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employee
is a debating topic,
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but
here, I will
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describe
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some
of my views regarding this topic either they are in
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favour
or in opposite opinion of this view.

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First of all
, a
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uniform
presents itself as a
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dress
code, no one
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feels
superior or inferior to anyone and that provides an
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employee
the comfort on their job, that
ultimately
leads to growing in profit. One of my friends was
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working
as a grinding
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man
in a
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company and
he always complained about the feeling of being inferior to their
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employee
,
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but
when the
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company
restricted all staffs to wear a
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uniform
, it
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helped
him to
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feel
comfortable on his job place.
Secondly
, an
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employee
wearing
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uniform
has no tension of contaminating the
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dress
and everybody
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feels
easiness in their
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working and
they
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work
freely
all kinds of
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work
in the
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company
.

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In spite of
above-mentioned advantages, there are
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some
disadvantages.
Firstly
, it is
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very
difficult for an
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employee
to wear the same
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dress
over and over again, each one
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gets
bored and try to avoid being in a
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uniform
. This thing affects their performance on
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work
.
Secondly
the
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man
in
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uniform
if having an allergy of specific
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dresses
like cotton, he always
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feels
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bad
and tries to avoid. Another reason, he always worries about their precious things that were
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kept
in their
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dresses
and
ultimately
he works
partially
hurt that leads to
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cut
in the production.

We find a way to tackle the situation by enforcing the
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uniform
for the
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employees
who are
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working
in the field or on a technical machine, while
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uniform
would not be necessary for peoples
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working
in clerical jobs or those who are sitting on managerial positions.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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