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nowadays clothes and fashion are important to people. what is your idea? v.1

nowadays clothes and fashion are important to people. what is your idea? v. 1
It's really important to me. I try to choose a dress that looks good. I like to have nice, neat, and snazzy clothing. I think people should be careful about the clothes they wear, because as an English proverb '' Clothes make the man. "So it may reflect part of your personality or status. Well, it's kind of depends on where I wear clothing. For example, I dress up for special occasions, or if I'm at home, I'm always in my leisurewear. But generally, I prefer casual clothes with striped and plaid fabric. But from my point of view, different factors which have influenced the styles of clothing such as geography, climate. I live in a cold region, so people usually wear clothes with leather and wool material. In my country, depending on the area where you live, there are different types of traditional dresses. Unfortunately, as urbanization spreads, these clothes are no longer in vogue, just in urban areas that people still wear a traditional dress every day then they help keep our country's culture alive. I'm so glad that one of my friends gave me a beautiful traditional dress as a souvenir. However, I haven't found a proper ceremony to wear it yet, because wearing these clothes is not common in big cities. Honestly, if clothes catch my eye, I buy it, no matter where it is. But I mostly buy from the shopping mall because there are a variety of brands and styles. Recently, online shopping has been my first choice for buying some clothes that allows me to save a lot of time. Actually, for me, the quality and price are more important than the place I buy. For example, I never buy an apparel that its cost is an arm and a leg. I always choose clothes with reasonably priced. When I was s student, I was wearing a school uniform. Indeed, Wearing uniforms are common in many places such as schools, factories, or health centre. The positive aspect is that you don't have to with someone's style so you can focus on your work or study, provided that the uniforms are comfortable and smart to persuade people to wear it. People have different attitudes to fashion. In my country, especially women are very choosy and fashion victim about what to wear. Moreover, young people are more influenced by trend these days. They recognize movie and music stars as a style icon and try to imitate them. However, some are indifferent to fashion. I believe that fashion should be balanced and proportioned to the customs and society's culture. Although some people are non-conformist.
It's
really
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important
to me. I try to choose a
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dress
that looks
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good
. I like to have nice, neat, and snazzy clothing.
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I
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think
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people
should be careful about the
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clothes
they
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wear
,
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because
as an English proverb ''
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Clothes
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make
the
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man
.
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
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So
it may reflect part of your personality or status.

Well, it's kind of depends on where I
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wear
clothing.
For example
, I
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dress
up for special occasions, or if I'm at home, I'm always in my leisurewear.
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But
generally
, I prefer casual
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clothes
with striped and plaid fabric.
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But
from my point of view,
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different
factors which have influenced the
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styles
of clothing such as geography, climate. I
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live
in a
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cold
region,
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so
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people
usually
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wear
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clothes
with leather and wool material.

In my country, depending on the area where you
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live
, there are
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different
types of traditional
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dresses
. Unfortunately, as urbanization spreads, these
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clothes
are no longer in vogue,
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just
in urban areas that
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people
still
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wear
a traditional
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dress
every day then they
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help
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keep
our country's culture alive. I'm
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so
glad that one of my friends gave me a
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beautiful
traditional
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dress
as a souvenir.
However
, I haven't found a proper ceremony to
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wear
it
yet
,
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because
wearing these
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clothes
is not common in
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big
cities.

Honestly
, if
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clothes
catch my eye, I
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buy
it, no matter where it is.
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But
I
mostly
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buy
from the shopping mall
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because
there are a variety of brands and
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styles
. Recently, online shopping has been my
first
choice for buying
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some
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clothes
that
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allows
me to save
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a lot of
time. Actually, for me, the quality and price are more
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important
than the place I
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buy
.
For example
, I never
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buy
an apparel that its cost is an arm and a leg. I always choose
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clothes
with
reasonably
priced.

When I was s student, I was wearing a school uniform.
Indeed
, Wearing uniforms are common in
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many
places such as schools, factories, or health
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centre
. The
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positive
aspect is that you don't
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have to
with someone's
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style
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so
you can focus on your work or study, provided that the uniforms are comfortable and smart to persuade
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people
to
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wear
it.

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People
have
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different
attitudes to
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fashion
. In my country,
especially
women are
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very
choosy and
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fashion
victim about what to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
.
Moreover
, young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are more influenced by trend these days. They recognize movie and music stars as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
style
icon and try to imitate them.
However
,
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some
are indifferent to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fashion
. I believe that
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fashion
should
be balanced
and proportioned to the customs and society's culture. Although
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are non-conformist.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay nowadays clothes and fashion are important to people. what is your idea? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
438 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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