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1. Daily activities2. Describe the type of clothes you prefer to wear. You should say: what the clothes look like, when you prefer to wear them, where you like to buy them. Explain why you like wearing these clothes. 3. Talking about clothes you like v.1

1. Daily activities2. Describe the type of clothes you prefer to wear. You should say: what the clothes look like, when you prefer to wear them, where you like to buy them. Explain why you like wearing these clothes. 3. Talking about clothes you like v. 1
Nowadays, many high schools make community service an optional element of their students’ curriculums. However, whereas some people believe that this unpaid service should be a mandatory part of the syllabus, I would argue that, while it is helpful, it should remain the student’s choice. One of the most significant benefits of community service for high school students is that such work prepares students for the world outside of education. This is important because students who have no awareness of what the working world is like may be overwhelmed when it finally comes around. For instance, a student who has experience of caring for the aged - a typical community service task - will be more able to adapt to the needs of elderly customers in a working role than one who does not. Thus, community work can give students more confidence about life after school. However, it is vital that this service is the sole choice of the student, as making such tasks compulsory may breed resentment towards the work. The reason for this is that people are naturally averse to doing anything which seems imposed upon them, especially without reward. Consequently, this resentment may then lead to poor quality work, negatively affecting both the student and the community itself. In contrast, if the student chooses to do community service for no pay, this is more likely to produce feelings of self-worth and satisfaction, contributing to better work. In conclusion, although offering high school students unpaid community service work may help them transition into the adult world, I believe such work should not be a necessary component of their programmes as this may foster negativity towards the tasks.
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high schools
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community
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service
an optional element of their
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curriculums.
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some
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believe that this unpaid
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should be a mandatory part of the syllabus, I would argue that, while it is helpful, it should remain the
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student’s
choice.

One of the most
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service
for high school
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for the world outside of education. This is
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important
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students
who have no awareness of what the working world is like may
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, a
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student
who has experience of caring for the aged
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a typical
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community
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service
task
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will be more able to adapt to the needs of elderly customers in a working role than one who does not.
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work
can give
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students
more
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confidence
about life after school.

However
, it is vital that this
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service
is the sole choice of the
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student
, as making such tasks compulsory may breed resentment towards the
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work
.
The reason for this is
that
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people
are
naturally
averse to doing anything which seems imposed upon them,
especially
without reward.
Consequently
, this resentment may then lead to poor quality
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work
,
negatively
affecting both the
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student
and the
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community
itself.
In contrast
, if the
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student
chooses to do
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community
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service
for no pay, this is more likely to produce feelings of self-worth and satisfaction, contributing to better work.

In conclusion
, although offering high school
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students
unpaid
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community
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service
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work
may
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help
them transition into the adult world, I believe such
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work
should not be a necessary component of their
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programmes
as this may foster negativity towards the tasks.
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IELTS essay 1. Daily activities2. Describe the type of clothes you prefer to wear. You should say: what the clothes look like, when you prefer to wear them, where you like to buy them. Explain why you like wearing these clothes. 3. Talking about clothes you like v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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