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Nowadays, children watch TV more than they did in the past. What are the reasons? Give solution. v.1

Nowadays, children watch TV more than they did in the past. What are the reasons? Give solution. v. 1
In this era, kids have developed more interest in watching televisions than before. The major reason behind this is the availability of a wide range of channels of their interests. However, to solve this problem parents can encourage their offsprings to take part in outdoor games to limit the access of television channels. To begin with, the fundamental cause behind children's fantasy about television is the abundance of shows that regularly broadcasted on television electronic equipments. To enhance the business, every year different company launch a variety of serials in the market according to the interest of infants. The reporters, Hindustan revealed that, in a few years, the number of Infant shows like Cartoon Network, Hungama, Pogo, et cetera had increased at larger extent than other fields of interests. Owing to limitless programmes, children always curious about about watching them. On the other hand, parents should boost up their kids to take part in outdoor activities by limiting the access to TV programmes. Similarly, this measure can be possible by awaring their children about negative impacts of watching cartoons or series, for a long run, on their health. It is exemplified that parents play an important role in creating the interest of their children, parents involved in outdoor activity helped their offsprings to limited the time of watching television broadcasting channels and these children have become more active in other outdoor activities. In conclusion, modern generation children have more interest in watching television than years before. The main reason behind this curiosity is the abundant amount of TV shows and programs broadcasted by various channels and to solve this problem, parents can help their children to enhance their interest in the outdoor games awaring them about side effects of the watching television for the long hours.
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interest
in watching
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televisions
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before
. The major reason behind this is the availability of a wide range of channels of their
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interests
.
However
, to solve this problem
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parents
can encourage their
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offsprings
to
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take part
in
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outdoor
games to limit the access of
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television
channels.

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begin
with, the fundamental cause behind children's fantasy about
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television
is the abundance of
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shows
that
regularly
broadcasted on
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television
electronic equipments. To enhance the business, every year
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different
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company
launch a variety of serials in the market according to the
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interest
of infants. The reporters, Hindustan revealed that, in a few years, the number of Infant
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shows
like Cartoon Network,
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Hungama
, Pogo,
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et cetera
had increased at larger extent than other fields of
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interests
. Owing to limitless
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programmes
,
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children
always curious
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about about
watching them.

On the other hand
,
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parents
should boost up their kids to
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take part
in
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outdoor
activities by limiting the access to TV
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programmes
.
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, this measure can be possible by
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awaring
their
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children
about
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negative
impacts of watching cartoons or series, for a long run, on their health. It
is exemplified
that
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parents
play an
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important
role in creating the
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interest
of their
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children
,
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parents
involved in
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outdoor
activity
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helped
their
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offsprings
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to limited
the time of watching
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television
broadcasting channels and these
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children
have become more active in other
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outdoor
activities.

In conclusion
, modern generation
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children
have more
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interest
in watching
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television
than years
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before
. The main reason behind this curiosity is the abundant amount of TV
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shows
and programs broadcasted by various channels and to solve this problem,
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parents
can
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help
their
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children
to enhance their
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interest
in the
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outdoor
games
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awaring
them about side effects of the watching
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television
for the long hours.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays, children watch TV more than they did in the past. What are the reasons? Give solution. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6
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