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Nowadays, children watch TV more than they did in the past. What are the reasons? Give solution. v.4

Nowadays, children watch TV more than they did in the past. What are the reasons? Give solution. v. 4
These days, a growing number of young parents determine to give birth later in their life. This can be attributed to some reasons and some effects either positive or negative can be considered. There are a number of reasons to explain this issue. First, since many young people are willing to pursue careers, delaying parenthood helps them have much more time to get more done. This means that they can lead to greater success in their work. Second, young individuals understand the magnitude of child rearing responsibility, they in turn give birth later. In fact, taking care of babies, either feeding or soothing babies is considered as a full time job, which discourages many would – be parents. On the other hand, giving birth later has significant effects on young couples. On the positive side, it helps would – be parents spend more time on either personal hobbies or career promotion. For example, they can be travel more to enjoy their life and get more done with better commitments instead of taking care of their babies all day, which helps them get high level of happiness. On the negative one, delaying parenthood is responsible for infertility in many couples. In fact, people getting older are less likely to conceive, which costs an enormous amount of money to rescue them from this problem. In conclusion, giving babies later which is the trend of the modern times has many tremendous impacts on people's life. By considering all the pros and the cons, young couples can make the best decision.
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parents determine to give birth
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later
in their life. This can
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are willing to pursue careers, delaying parenthood
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them have much more
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time
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get
more done. This means that they can lead to greater success in their work. Second,
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young
individuals understand the magnitude of child rearing responsibility, they in turn give birth
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later
. In fact, taking care of
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babies
, either feeding or soothing
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babies
is considered
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time
job, which discourages
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be parents.

On the other hand
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young
couples. On the
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be parents spend more
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time
on either personal hobbies or career promotion.
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, they can be travel more to enjoy their life and
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get
more done with better commitments
instead
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babies
all day, which
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helps
them
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get
high level of happiness. On the
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negative
one, delaying parenthood is responsible for infertility in
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many
couples. In fact,
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people
getting older are less likely to conceive, which costs an enormous amount of money to rescue them from this problem.

In conclusion
, giving
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babies
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later
which is the trend of the modern
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times
has
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many
tremendous impacts on
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people
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young
couples can
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make
the best decision.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, children watch TV more than they did in the past. What are the reasons? Give solution. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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