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Nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time being active or creative. What is the reason for this? What measures should be taken to encourage children to be more active

Nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things. What are the reasons? What measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creative things? v. 2
Today children spend more time watching television than at any point in the past. There are several reasons for such a situation; however, a few productive suggestions can solve the problem to a large extent. The causes and the measures are discussed further. The main reason that many children today spend an outsized amount of time watching television is that it is widely available on streaming websites. YouTube was the earliest, and now the most popular, streaming website for video content. Children are often allowed to watch it on smartphones or iPads. The more recent rise of streaming websites like Netflix and Hulu provide the same experience as television on the internet. Simply put, children spend more time watching because they have the ability to choose whatever show they want, pause it, and binge watch TV shows on a variety of portable devices with limited adult supervision. In order to discourage children from watching television, parents should not give their children smartphones under any circumstances. This is the first step that responsible parents must undertake. Once children are no longer tempted by phones, it is much easier to get them interested in creative outlets. Parents can sign up their children for art or music lessons. They could encourage them to do art at home and instead of putting a TV in their room, fill it with books and art supplies. Children’s natural curiosity and artistic energy will naturally take over from that point and parents then need only supervise, guide and intervene when called upon. In conclusion, parents can counterbalance the rise of streaming by banning portable devices and stocking up on art supplies. Unfortunately, it will take a concerted effort from the majority of parents to prevent children without devices from being ostracised socially.
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television
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are discussed
further
. The main reason that
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children
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television
is that it is
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available on
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streaming
websites. YouTube was the earliest, and
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the most popular,
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website for video content.
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are
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often
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to
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watch
it on smartphones or iPads. The more recent rise of
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streaming
websites like Netflix and Hulu provide the same experience as
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television
on the internet.
Simply
put,
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children
spend more time watching
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because
they have the ability to choose whatever
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show
they want, pause it, and binge
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watch
TV
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shows
on a variety of portable devices with limited adult supervision. In order to discourage
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children
from watching
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television
,
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parents
should not give their
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children
smartphones under any circumstances. This is the
first
step that responsible
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parents
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must
undertake. Once
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children
are no longer tempted by phones, it is much easier to
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get
them interested in creative outlets.
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Parents
can
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sign
up their
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children
for
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art
or music lessons. They could encourage them to do
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art
at home and
instead
of putting a TV in their room, fill it with books and
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art
supplies.
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Children’s
natural curiosity and artistic energy will
naturally
take over from that point and
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parents
then need
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only
supervise, guide and intervene when called upon.

In conclusion
,
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parents
can counterbalance the rise of
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streaming
by banning portable devices and stocking up on
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art
supplies. Unfortunately, it will take a concerted effort from the majority of
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parents
to
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prevent
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children
without devices from being
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ostracised
socially
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time being active or creative. What is the reason for this? What measures should be taken to encourage children to be more active

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