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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this sets a bad example to the young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Celebrities lavish and glittery life are popular among youngster these days and it may influence them in bad way. This essay highlights the bad influence on young generation By celebrities lifestyle. In this digital era, with the power of social media like Instagram and Facebook, celebrities can connect and share anything they want to share among their followers etc vacation pictures, partying, new car and house. This make them more famous among fans for their lifestyle and that increasingpopularity of the celebrities more about lifestyle and richnessthan their work. With the help of social media now a days fans knows more about personal life of celebrities very easily and get easily attracted and try to adept the way celebrities live. A celebrities is always popular for their extravagant life among fans and it gives wrong message to young generation. Youngsters admire and follow famous people and try to follow their foot print to become like them. They wish to adept and achieve to match the way celebrities live and party but sometimes in the process to achieve they end up put themselves in trouble. Some indulge themselves into illegal activity to gain resource to become rich or some get into drug and alcohol. Young generation thinks doing thing like celebrities make them popular and famous too. In conclusion, These days Social media platform reveals and increase popularity of personal life of a celebrities among fans and it influence them in bad way too. It also misguidesyoung generation sometime that leads to put negative impact in their life.
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lavish and glittery
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life
are popular among youngster these
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days and
it may influence them in
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way. This essay highlights the
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influence on young generation

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celebrities
lifestyle.

In this digital era, with the power of social media like Instagram and Facebook,
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celebrities
can connect and share anything they want to share among their followers etc vacation pictures, partying, new car and
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house
. This
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make
them more
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famous
among fans for their lifestyle and that
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increasingpopularity
of the
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celebrities
more about lifestyle and
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richnessthan
their work. With the
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help
of social media
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now a days
fans knows more about personal
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life
of
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celebrities
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easily
and
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attracted and try to adept the way
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celebrities
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live
.

A
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always popular for their extravagant
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among
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fans and
it gives
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message to young generation. Youngsters admire and follow
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famous
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people
and try to follow their
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foot print
to become like them. They wish to adept and achieve to match the way
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celebrities
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live
and party
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but
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sometimes
in the process to achieve they
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up put themselves in trouble.
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indulge themselves into illegal activity to gain resource to become rich or
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some
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get
into drug and alcohol. Young generation
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thinks
doing thing like
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celebrities
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make
them popular and
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famous
too.

In conclusion
,

These days Social media platform reveals and increase popularity of personal
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life
of a
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celebrities
among
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fans and
it
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influence
them in
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bad
way too. It
also
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misguidesyoung
generation sometime that leads to put
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negative
impact in their
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life
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.

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  American English
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