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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.4

Allure and luxury are the two basic criteria for a well-known person which inturn leads to set a wrong precedence among the youth. Yes I agree with this statement. This essay will discuss the adverse effect of name & fame which sets a wrong example for the youngsters. Nowdays individuals are recognised on the basis of their net worth and by tax paying capacity rather than their deeds. More lavish lifestyle and investment leads to hit the top rankers among the society. Many veteran actors are addicted to drugs they have connection with the underworld. Our young generation tries to follow them blindly. The celebrities post their pictures and are very active on social networking sites which are visible to everyone, displaying lavish lifestyle, huge bunglows, social gattering pictures, very expensive clothes, jewellery and envious collection of automobiles. The teenegers are carried away by this display and start weaving a world of fantasy. which often leads to ruin their goal because they get dremy and are determined to acheive all this by hook and crook but the world of realty is far from all this. They career is completely ruined when they set their feet on the stark realty of life. This essay has discussed the after effects of the glamorous world of VIPs on the impressionable minds of the youth who are unable to distinct between the right and wrong. I fully agree with this statement and adviced youth the key to achieve their goal is hardwork, patience and deternimation. Instead of getting influenced with charismatic world build their own mark and set examples in their respective fields.
Allure and luxury are the two basic criteria for a well-known person which
inturn
leads to set a
wrong
precedence among the youth. Yes I
agree
with this statement. This essay will discuss the adverse effect of name & fame which sets a
wrong
example for the youngsters.

Nowdays
individuals are
recognised
on the basis of their net worth and by tax paying capacity
rather
than their deeds. More lavish lifestyle and investment leads to hit the top
rankers
among the society.
Many
veteran actors
are addicted
to drugs they have connection with the underworld. Our young generation tries to follow them
blindly
.

The celebrities post their pictures and are
very
active on social networking sites which are visible to everyone, displaying lavish lifestyle, huge
bunglows
, social
gattering
pictures,
very
expensive clothes,
jewellery
and envious collection of automobiles. The
teenegers
are carried
away by this display and
start
weaving a
world
of fantasy.
which
often
leads to ruin their goal
because
they
get
dremy
and
are determined
to
acheive
all this by hook and crook
but
the
world
of realty is far from all this. They career is completely ruined when they set their feet on the stark realty of life.

This essay has discussed the after effects of the glamorous
world
of VIPs on the impressionable minds of the youth who are unable to distinct between the right and
wrong
. I
fully
agree
with this statement and
adviced
youth the key to achieve their goal is
hardwork
, patience and
deternimation
.
Instead
of getting influenced with charismatic
world
build their
own
mark and set examples in their respective fields.
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IELTS essay Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
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