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Everyday traffic seems to get worse on our roads. how can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? v.1

Everyday traffic seems to get worse on our roads. how can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? v. 1
Traffic congestion is now becoming a global problem. It is undeniable that the automotive industry has blessed our lives with many comforts but this blessing proved to be unpleasant in the face of traffic congestion. This will create worse situations on our roads. This is mainly because of high volume of vehicles and the inadequate infrastructure and cart pooling and use public transport, massively, could solve this problem. To initiate with, there is a myraid of reasons for the increase in traffic. In the modern era, due to the advent of technology, number of cars increases for the roadways which sometime block the roads. For instance, many people have their own vehicles and they use then for office as well as for their daily routine which usually block roads in almost all cities. Moreover, lack of infrastructure such as traffic signals sync out and inadequate green time are also the causes of traffic jams. There are many alternatives to handle the aforementioned issues and to avoid congestion. They are fewer cars and trucks on the road, increase in mass transit options etcetera. In addition, it is necessary to build these pedestrian overpass and more lanes in the street in order to reduce traffic and accidents. People should use car pooling or two-wheeler vehicles instead of taking car in public places especially during festivals. To conclude, single flower can not make the garland, so, government and society should encourage people to use public transport or vehicles with small size such as bicycles or make tax on private vehicles. Traffic problems should be controlled if checked strategically and impose it wisely.
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congestion is
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now
becoming a global problem. It is undeniable that the automotive industry has blessed our
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lives
with
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many
comforts
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but
this blessing proved to be unpleasant in the face of
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traffic
congestion. This will create worse situations on our
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roads
. This is
mainly
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because
of high volume of
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vehicles
and the inadequate infrastructure and cart pooling and
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use
public transport,
massively
, could solve this problem.

To initiate with, there is a
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myraid
of reasons for the increase in
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traffic
. In the modern era, due to the advent of technology, number of
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cars
increases for the roadways which sometime block the
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roads
.
For instance
,
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many
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people
have their
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own
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vehicles and
they
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use
then for office
as well
as for their daily routine which
usually
block
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roads
in almost all cities.
Moreover
, lack of infrastructure such as
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traffic
signals sync out and inadequate green time are
also
the causes of
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traffic
jams.

There are
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many
alternatives to handle the aforementioned issues and to avoid congestion. They are fewer
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cars
and trucks on the
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road
, increase in mass transit options etcetera.
In addition
, it is necessary to build these pedestrian overpass and more lanes in the street in order to
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reduce
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traffic
and accidents.
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should
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use
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car
pooling or two-wheeler
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vehicles
instead
of taking
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car
in public places
especially
during festivals.

To conclude
, single flower can not
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make
the garland,
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so
,
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government
and society should encourage
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people
to
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use
public transport or
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vehicles
with
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small
size such as bicycles or
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make
tax on private
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vehicles
.
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Traffic
problems should
be controlled
if
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checked
strategically
and impose it
wisely
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Everyday traffic seems to get worse on our roads. how can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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