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Nowadays, a lot of people are able to do their work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development? v.1

Nowadays, a lot of people are able to do their work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development? v. 1
The large number of young population is getting attracted towards IT industry where they can possibly get lots of perks and benefits - working from home is one of them. It is subjective to decide whether it is perk or loss, as each individual has his own reasons. This essay will discuss both sides of this byproduct of the industry. Though we are not actually busy whole day in personal work, most of the time, our presence is necessary in the family, or if we are not in the city, but we cannot have leaves as well, we can use this as a perk. It avails to work from anywhere and not forcing to be, physically present in the office. For example, when I had an accident and unable to walk, it was difficult to travel to the office. But that time, not to pamper work, I could work from the hospital, as I normally work. On the contrary, this can be considered as a loss also, as it is having no time bounds. When the employee has all the required things with him, managers can tend to think that, why he can’t be active, after pre-decided hours. Additionally, we cannot cut the personal things aside, and solely concentrate on work, as we are at home. For example, I need to keep an eye on household chores, while working for professional commitment, which collectively can cause more work and makes me exhaust. In conclusion, I can say that, work from home can be a boon, if we use it wisely and in inevitable circumstances and bane, if we are addicted to it and started using it, with no bounds. After all, it will be good if anything is used in a controlled manner, by keeping individual’s check on it.
The large number of young population is getting attracted towards IT industry where they can
possibly
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get
lots of perks and benefits
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working from home is one of them. It is subjective to decide whether it is perk or loss, as each individual has his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
reasons. This essay will discuss both sides of this byproduct of the industry.

Though we are not actually busy whole day in personal
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work
, most of the time, our presence is necessary in the family, or if we are not in the city,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we cannot have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
as well
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this as a perk. It avails to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
from anywhere and not forcing to be,
physically
present in the office.
For example
, when I had an accident and unable to walk, it was difficult to travel to the office.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
that time, not to pamper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, I could
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work
from the hospital, as I
normally
work.

On the contrary
, this can
be considered
as a loss
also
, as it is having no time bounds. When the employee has all the required things with him, managers can tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that, why he can’t be active, after
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pre-decided
hours.
Additionally
, we cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
the personal things aside, and
solely
concentrate on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, as we are at home.
For example
, I need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
an eye on household chores, while working for professional commitment, which
collectively
can cause more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
me exhaust.

In conclusion
, I can say that,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
from home can be a boon, if we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it
wisely
and in inevitable circumstances and bane, if we
are addicted
to it and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
using it, with no bounds.
After all
, it will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
if anything is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in a controlled manner, by keeping individual’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
on it.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, a lot of people are able to do their work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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