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Some people think that recruiting companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others consider they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that recruiting companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others consider they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. v. 1
According to some people companies should prefer innovative and independent workers when selecting employees. On the other hand, others think that team workers should be given preference instead of those who can work independently. In my opinion, a company needs both types of people for optimal growth. Those, who are in favour of creative and independent workers, claim that such employees bring in new ideas and develop new technological products and apps. This leads to an increase in the sales as well as improve the reputation of the company. Since the advent of new age technologies, a brilliant idea can help a company make a fortune. Hence, innovative employees who can work without supervision are an asset for any organization. However, some people believe that teamwork is the key to the success of a company. They hold the view that working together stimulates brainstorming. When people with different skills, point of views and experiences work together, they can create great innovations. Teamwork and the ability to follow instructions mean that employees learn to cope with challenges and remain disciplined in every situation. Moreover, they can compensate for each other’s weaknesses and develop a problem solving attitude. All of these are highly beneficial for a company or a business to be successful. For instance, a recent research showed that 80% of the successful businesses had more employees who were better team workers than independent workers. In conclusion, I believe that both kinds of workers are needed in a company. When recruiting staff, employers should look for both skills – the ability to work with others as well as the ability to work independently in some situations. This can make the companies look more dynamic and lead to economic growth.
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needs both types of
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people
for optimal growth.

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workers
, claim that such
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employees
bring in new
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ideas
and develop new technological products and apps. This leads to an increase in the sales
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company
. Since the advent of new age technologies, a brilliant
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company
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without supervision are an asset for any organization.

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,
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believe that teamwork is the key to the success of a
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company
. They hold the view that working together stimulates brainstorming. When
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people
with
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skills
, point of views and experiences
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together, they can create great innovations. Teamwork and the ability to follow instructions mean that
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employees
learn to cope with challenges and remain disciplined in every situation.
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other’s
weaknesses and develop a problem solving attitude. All of these are
highly
beneficial for a
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company
or a business to be successful.
For instance
, a recent research
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showed
that 80% of the successful businesses had more
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employees
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were better team
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workers
than independent workers.

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, I believe that both kinds of
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workers
are needed
in a
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company
. When recruiting staff, employers should look for both
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skills
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the ability to
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with others
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as well as
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independently
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situations. This can
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look more dynamic and lead to economic growth.
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IELTS essay Some people think that recruiting companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others consider they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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