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Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage. In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. Howe v.1

Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage. In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. Howe v. 1
In our contemporary society, most people, no matter adults or children, are magnetized by watching TV shows and movies in the crime genre as a recreation. Needless to say, as this genre has been of broad interest to the general public, it has brought a new set of concerns with it that demands attention. This essay will firstly find the main reasons behind this phenomenon and then will elaborate its impact on our society. To start with, people are intrinsically adventurous so that their energy is expected to be dissipated with carrying out exciting activities. One way to fulfil this goal and trigger an adrenaline rush, is indisputably to watch criminal TV shows and movies, most of which feature action scenes as well as advance effects. In addition, some prohibited, exciting activities which people are not allowed to do them in real regular life, such as shooting, are shown in these kinds of movies that results in engrossing those people who have vigorous personality and get an adrenaline hit On the other hand, criminal TV shows and movies have undoubtedly a profound impact on our community, so that not only do people become familiar with a variety of crimes, but they also learn the ways to deal with them. Looked at in one way, watching this genre can allow people to find a suitable method to resist criminals; looked at in another way, it worryingly leads to increased aggressive behaviour in society, paving the way for widespread chaos. For instance, although television programs about kidnapping have made parents aware of their children, considering this crime as a tool to fulfil the dreams of criminals is incredibly on the rise, while if these films were not broadcast, this crime would not have spread so much. In conclusion, due to the appeal of criminal TV shows and movies to the public, the broadcast of such a genre is inevitable and has become a public need. However, it is no exaggeration to say that aggressive behaviour in society can be attributed to these kinds of TV programs.
In our contemporary society, most
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people
, no matter adults or children,
are magnetized
by watching TV
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shows
and
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movies
in the
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crime
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genre
as a recreation. Needless to say, as this
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genre
has been of broad interest to the
Consider using "public".
general public
, it has brought a new set of concerns with it that demands attention. This essay will
firstly
find the main reasons behind this phenomenon and then will elaborate its impact on our society.

To
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start
with,
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people
are
intrinsically
adventurous
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so
that their energy is
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expected
to
be dissipated
with carrying out exciting activities. One way to fulfil this goal and trigger an adrenaline rush, is
indisputably
to
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watch
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criminal
TV
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shows
and
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movies
, most of which feature action scenes
as well
as advance effects.
In addition
,
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some
prohibited, exciting activities which
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people
are not
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allowed
to do them in real regular life, such as shooting,
are shown
in these kinds of
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movies
that results in engrossing those
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people
who have vigorous personality and
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get
an adrenaline hit

On the other hand
,
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criminal
TV
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shows
and
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movies
have
undoubtedly
a profound impact on our community,
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so
that not
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only
do
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people
become familiar with a variety of
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crimes
,
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but
they
also
learn the ways to deal with them. Looked at in one way, watching this
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genre
can
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allow
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people
to find a suitable method to resist
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criminals
; looked at in another way, it
worryingly
leads to increased aggressive
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behaviour
in society, paving the way for widespread chaos.
For instance
, although television programs about kidnapping have made parents aware of their children, considering this
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crime
as a tool to fulfil the dreams of
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criminals
is
incredibly
on the rise, while if these films were not broadcast, this
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crime
would not have spread
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so
much.

In conclusion
, due to the appeal of
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criminal
TV
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shows
and
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movies
to the public, the broadcast of such a
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genre
is inevitable and has become a public need.
However
, it is no exaggeration to say that aggressive
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
in society can
be attributed
to these kinds of TV programs.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage. In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. Howe v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
344 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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