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Now a days many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v.1

Now a days many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 1
Communication among people is developed more when compared to the past because of technology and has many ways to interact with the people. Firstly, this essay will discuss about how the technology affected the types of relationships people make and secondly, this essay will discuss about the pros and cons of this development. It is easier to communicate with the people who are at far distinct places because of new gadgets. The relationships among people are affected due to the advancement of new interactive ways. For instance, It is simple to send messages to a person who is in another country, But many of us are using these methods in a detrimental way. The direct meeting between people is changed to Skype or video calls. This affects the relationship between people due to lack of direct communication. By the above aforementioned points the telecommunications has become a positive progress, Apart from this it also has negative uses. However, the method people interact with each other has changed due to technology. For example, people can use many social media platforms like Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, Snapchat, What's app, to connect with new people around he globe. Even though it is helpful for the people, it must be used in a right way. To conclude, our lifestyle has changed more and became much easier. It is also important that interaction between people should be direct, as it helps to feel the emotion and can help in the improvement of a relationship. Parents should encourage their children to meet new people and build a bond between them.
Communication among
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people
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is
developed more when compared to the past
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because
of technology and has
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many
ways to interact with the
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people
.
Firstly
, this essay will
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discuss about how
the technology
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affected
the types of
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relationships
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people
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make
and
secondly
, this essay will
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discuss about the
pros and cons of this development.

It is easier to communicate with the
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people
who are at far distinct places
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because
of
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new
gadgets. The
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relationships
among
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people
are
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affected
due to the advancement of
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new
interactive ways.
For instance
, It is simple to
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send
messages to a person who is in another country,
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But
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many
of us are using these methods
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in a detrimental way
. The direct meeting between
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people
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is
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changed
to Skype or video calls. This affects the
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relationship
between
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people
due to lack of direct communication.

By the above aforementioned points the telecommunications has become a
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positive
progress, Apart from this it
also
has
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negative
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uses
.
However
, the method
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people
interact with each other has
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changed
due to technology.
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,
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people
can
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use
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many
social media platforms like Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, Snapchat, What's app, to connect with
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new
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people
around
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he
globe.
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it is helpful for the
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people
, it
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must
be
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used
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in a right way
.

To conclude
, our lifestyle has
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changed
more and became much easier. It is
also
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important
that interaction between
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people
should be direct, as it
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helps
to feel the emotion and can
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help
in the improvement of a
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relationship
. Parents should encourage their children to
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meet
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new
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people
and build a bond between them.
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IELTS essay Now a days many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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