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Report research suggests that majority of criminals who were sent to prison would commit crimes when they are set free. What do you think of this case? What to be done to solve this problem? v.3

Report research suggests that majority of criminals who were sent to prison would commit crimes when they are set free. What do you think of this case? What to be done to solve this problem? v. 3
It is a serious and glaring threat to the society, those who have been prosecuted to jail trial and still have a mindset to prevail the crime when they are free. This fueling issue needs to be actionable by intervening with nabbed laws and strict rules to avoid happenings in future. Let's discuss some preventive measures could be considered. Firstly, the quality of life in prison should make it very difficult that some individuals been in prison must think that life in prison is miserable. Apparently, in school studies itself needs to educate the importance of life and the humanity should be developed in each individual's life. In most of the documentary regarding the life in prison shown as very simple and has all facilities. These needs to eradicate, and the facility been offered should be limited. Moreover, the government official can identify these trend people and medicate them for counselling to recover. In addition to that, the government needs to study the cause and reason behind on each individual who has been prosecuted. The trend of committing the crime is often because of poverty and lack of opportunity for each individual. Those who have educated know the importance of life and will not avail these kinds of activities, perhaps on the other hand people who have been struggling for their daily life, tends to commit crimes. It is more on individual's responsibility to take care of them and their surroundings. Each division or urban society can learn their own people's problem and try resolving, if these is been taken care it will be a drastic change, There is a saying ‘little drops make an ocean’. We need to set protocol to follow right rules and disciplinary behaviour in each individual's home, which makes external life easier. In conclusion, to commit crimes again and again or to live an awesome life is individual's responsibility. Everyone needs to understand the importance of life, to respect others in all sense and to safeguard the society. Those who have been prosecuted are needed to be given ample opportunity to survive and to recover out of it.
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who
have
been prosecuted
to jail trial and
still
have a mindset to prevail the
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crime
when they are free. This fueling issue
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needs
to be actionable by intervening with nabbed laws and strict
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rules
to avoid happenings
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in future
.
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Let
's discuss
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some
preventive measures could
be considered
.

Firstly
, the quality of
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life
in
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prison
should
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make
it
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very
difficult that
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some
individuals been in
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prison
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must
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think
that
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life
in
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prison
is miserable.
Apparently
, in school studies itself
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needs
to educate the importance of
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life
and the humanity should
be developed
in each
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individual's
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life
. In most of the documentary regarding the
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life
in
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prison
shown as
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very
simple and has all facilities. These
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needs
to eradicate, and the facility
been offered
should
be limited
.
Moreover
, the
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government
official can identify these trend
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people
and medicate them for counselling to recover.

In addition
to that, the
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government
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needs
to study the cause and reason behind on each individual
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who
has
been prosecuted
. The trend of committing the
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crime
is
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often
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because
of poverty and lack of opportunity for each individual. Those
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who
have educated know the importance of
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life
and will not avail these kinds of activities, perhaps
on the other hand
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people
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who
have been struggling for their daily
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life
, tends to commit
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crimes
. It is more on
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individual's
responsibility to take care of them and their surroundings. Each division or urban society can learn their
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own
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people
's problem and try resolving, if these
is been
taken care it will be a drastic
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change
, There is a saying ‘
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little
drops
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make
an ocean’. We
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need
to set protocol to follow right
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rules
and disciplinary
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behaviour
in each
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individual's
home, which
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makes
external
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life
easier.

In conclusion
, to commit
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crimes
again and again or to
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live
an awesome
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life
is
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individual's
responsibility. Everyone
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needs
to understand the importance of
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life
, to respect others in all sense and to safeguard the society. Those
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who
have
been prosecuted
are needed
to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
ample opportunity to survive and to recover out of it.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Report research suggests that majority of criminals who were sent to prison would commit crimes when they are set free. What do you think of this case? What to be done to solve this problem? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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