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Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what type of neighbor is the best to have? -someone who is quiet-someone who we are similar to-someone who is supportive v.4

Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what type of neighbor is the best to have? -someone who is quiet-someone who we are similar to-someone who is supportive v. 4
Being social being, we are born to live in a society, in which people are cooperative and share each others' joys and sorrows. Neighbor are the first ones, whom we get at our beside firstly in any circumstances. As they have great effect on our day to daily life, we must have a congenial relationship with them and this relationship will resulted into mutual benefit. I personally, believe that the foremost and important prerequisite of a good neighbor is cooperative and supportive attitude. I assert this view because of two following reasons, which I will elaborate in the following few paragraphs. First of all, I argue that the neighbor should be supportive. This is so because neighbors are the people, who will first come in any situations. They are the first person of getting informed in any kind of difficulties. But if the neighbors are not supportive then we will not get the proper help from them and it will resulted into great losses. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Because, few years back, I encountered fire in my apartment and as soon as my neighbors saw this they came to support me with all their resources. As a result, this fire did not cost me a lot. Therefore, I always possess that the people living next to your door must be supportive. Secondly, neighbors are the people, who are always the first person to help us in case of any emergency and if these people are not cooperative then we have to numerous hazards. For instance, just one week before I was on leave from my organization and my wife was at her office. Then suddenly she fell sick and I had to go to her office for bringing her to see a doctor. But there was a concern that who will take care of my children. Then I knocked my neighbors and after telling my emergency situations, they welcomed my children to their house. In conclusion, I believe that the neighbors should be supportive. This is so because they are the person who come to know about any emergency situation/difficulties before other person. If the neighbors are not supportive and do not have the cooperative mentality, it may result into huge damages.
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live
in a society, in which
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people
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cooperative
and share each
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Neighbor
are the
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first
ones, whom we
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get
at our beside
firstly
in any circumstances. As they have great effect on our day to daily life, we
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must
have a congenial relationship with them and this relationship will
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resulted
into mutual benefit. I
personally
, believe that the foremost and
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important
prerequisite of a
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good
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neighbor
is
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cooperative
and supportive attitude. I assert this view
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because
of two following reasons, which I will elaborate in the following few paragraphs.

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, I argue that the
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neighbor
should be supportive. This is
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because
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neighbors
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,
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who
will
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first
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come
in any situations. They are the
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first
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person
of getting informed in any kind of difficulties.
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But
if the
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neighbors
are not supportive then we will not
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get
the proper
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help
from them and it will
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resulted
into great losses. My personal experience is a compelling example of this.
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Because
, few years back, I encountered fire in my apartment and as
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soon
as my
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neighbors
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saw
this they came to support me with all their resources.
As a result
, this fire did not cost me a lot.
Therefore
, I always possess that the
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people
living
next
to your door
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must
be supportive.

Secondly
,
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neighbors
are the
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people
,
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who
are always the
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first
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person
to
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help
us in case of any emergency and if these
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people
are not
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cooperative
then we
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have to
numerous hazards.
For instance
,
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just
one week
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before
I was on
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leave
from my organization and my wife was at her office. Then
suddenly
she fell sick and I had to go to her office for bringing her to
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see
a doctor.
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But
there was a concern that
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who
will take care of my children. Then I knocked my
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neighbors
and after telling my emergency situations, they welcomed my children to their
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house
.

In conclusion
, I believe that the
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neighbors
should be supportive. This is
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so
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because
they are the
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person
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who
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come
to know about any emergency situation/difficulties
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before
other
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person
. If the
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neighbors
are not supportive and do not have the
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cooperative
mentality, it may result into huge damages.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what type of neighbor is the best to have? -someone who is quiet-someone who we are similar to-someone who is supportive v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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