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Neighbor are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the good quality of a good neighbor? v.1

Neighbor are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the good quality of a good neighbor? v. 1
Personal and public health are tightly related to food choices. While few people opine that government should interfere and control the consumption of their people to regulate healthy diet, others argue that it must be the individual’s choice. However, I am in support with second notion that the authorities should not dominate the food people buy. To embark with, legislators could impose laws concerning nutritious food in an effort to have a healthier population in an attempt to reduce the budget on public health. Although, this solution sounds good, it is impractical and quite hard to implement. To achieve this target, the rulers could impose heavy levy on junk food and unhealthy sugary products, or reduce the availability of such options in the grocery stores. For example, In Italy, the tax obtrude on sugary carbonated drinks and chips is fairly high such that the consumption of those products is less. However, if authorities start to take control of what to eat by their citizens and what not to, it is a gigantic question on the human rights and seemed as restriction on freedom. Since, freedom is extremely important, people do not see this as a good option but they want to take charge of their own diet with many options. Besides this, above approach may afflict to dissatisfaction, consequently people may lead to the other issues, such protests and demonstrations. The ideal way is to educate people above harms and negative effects of unhealthy food. Moreover, constant information about healthy food intake might lead to a self aware society without any side effects. Also, this approach is well tested by few known developed countries and it works well to certain extend. To put this in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that even though the government is able to take charge of healthy dietary habits of the population through taxation and restriction, It might work outcome negatively instead of healthier citizens and reduced public health expenses. It is best to leave up to well informed citizen with efforts to educating people about nutritious food options.
Personal and public health are
tightly
related to
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food
choices. While few
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people
opine that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should interfere and control the consumption of their
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people
to regulate healthy diet, others argue that it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be the individual’s choice.
However
, I am in support with second notion that the authorities should not dominate the
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food
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
.

To embark with, legislators could impose laws concerning nutritious
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food
in an effort to have a healthier population in an attempt to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the budget on public health. Although, this solution sounds
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
, it is impractical and quite
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hard
to implement. To achieve this target, the rulers could impose heavy levy on junk
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food
and unhealthy sugary products, or
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reduce
the availability of such
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options
in the grocery stores.
For example
, In Italy, the tax obtrude on sugary carbonated drinks and chips is
fairly
high such that the consumption of those products is less.

However
, if authorities
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start
to take control of what to eat by their citizens and what not to, it is a gigantic question on the human rights and seemed as restriction on freedom. Since, freedom is
extremely
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important
,
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people
do not
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see
this as a
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good
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option
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but
they want to take charge of their
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own
diet with
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many
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options
.
Besides
this, above approach may afflict to dissatisfaction,
consequently
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people
may lead to the other issues, such protests and demonstrations. The ideal way is to educate
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people
above harms and
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negative
effects of unhealthy
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food
.
Moreover
, constant information about healthy
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food
intake might lead to a
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
self aware
society without any side effects.
Also
, this approach is well
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tested
by few known
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developed countries
and it works well to certain
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extend
.

To put this in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that
even though
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is able to take charge of healthy dietary habits of the population through taxation and restriction, It might work outcome
negatively
instead
of healthier citizens and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
public health expenses. It is best to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
up to
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well informed
citizen with efforts to educating
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people
about nutritious
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food
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options
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Neighbor are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the good quality of a good neighbor? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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