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Nearly every new building is designed by an architect nowadays. Some people believe that is important for a building. v.2

Nearly every new building is designed by an architect nowadays. Some people believe that is important for a building. v. 2
With growing advancement and technologies, the architectural field has also been escalated nowadays. People are becoming much more advanced and want perfection and luxury. Today, many people get their houses designed by an architect. To some people, this seems needless, while others consider it the important thing for constructing a building. In my opinion, construction should involve a person with expertise to get the best result out of it. Several reasons for this are explained further. Initially, buildings and houses were made of wood, bamboo sticks and stone to serve the purpose of just providing shelter. Whereas today apart from providing just a roof over our heads, it has many other purposes to serve. Firstly, safety and security are two important reasons to live in a house. Therefore, people today hire an expert to design a house that is safe and sound. High-quality materials are being used to make it durable and long lasting. Secondly, as the population is growing rapidly, there is a need of space for the people to live. A structure designed by an architect can help solving the problem. Buildings using less land can be made to accommodate more people and saving a lot of space. For example, in Japan, people are working on a project to build underground complexes so that less land is consumed and is eco-friendly as well. Finally, today different shapes and styles of buildings have become a symbol of status and luxury. To conclude, I believe that without an expertise help all the above-mentioned factors could not be achieved.   Therefore, wise and conservative type of buildings can solely be designed by an architect.
With growing advancement and technologies, the architectural field has
also
been escalated
nowadays.
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People
are becoming much more advanced and want perfection and luxury.
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Today
,
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people
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get
their
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houses
designed by an architect. To
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some
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people
, this seems needless, while others consider it the
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important
thing for constructing a
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building
. In my opinion, construction should involve a person with expertise to
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get
the best result out of it. Several reasons for this are
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explained
further
.

Initially
,
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buildings
and
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houses
were made
of wood, bamboo sticks and stone to serve the purpose of
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just
providing shelter. Whereas
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today
apart from providing
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just
a roof over our heads, it has
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many
other purposes to serve.
Firstly
, safety and security are two
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important
reasons to
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live
in a
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house
.
Therefore
,
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people
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today
hire an expert to design a
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house
that is
safe and sound. High-quality materials are being
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used
to
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make
it durable and
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long lasting
.
Secondly
, as the population is growing
rapidly
, there is a need of space for the
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people
to
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live
. A structure designed by an architect can
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help
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solving
the problem.
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Buildings
using less land can
be made
to accommodate more
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people
and saving
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a lot of
space.
For example
, in Japan,
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people
are working on a project to build underground complexes
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so
that less land
is consumed
and is eco-friendly
as well
.

Finally
,
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today
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different
shapes and styles of
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buildings
have become a symbol of status and luxury.

To conclude
, I believe that without an expertise
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help
all the above-mentioned factors could not
be achieved
.
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Therefore
, wise and conservative type of
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buildings
can
solely
be designed
by an architect.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nearly every new building is designed by an architect nowadays. Some people believe that is important for a building. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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