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Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music only brings benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however think that music can have a negative influence on both. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.4

Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music only brings benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however think that music can have a negative influence on both. v. 4
Music is rapidly becoming a vital part of human existence as it is cherished globally. Although, some are of the school of thought that music has a positive impact on people and communities, others believe it can also have deleterious effects instead. In my opinion, music is capable of having deterimental effects on humans and their communities. On one hand, music has benefited mankind tremendously since the dawn of time. It has relaxing properties on the body, especially in its slow forms. It can even calm the fiercest of persons. In addition, it gives people a means to express themselves and has been used for centuries as a form of communication. For example, in 2011, a research carried out at the Harvard medical institute, revealed that listening to music can significantly lower blood pressure, as well as improving mood. This has been so adapted that it has recently being used to calm hysterical patients On the other hand, music tends to influence the life of its listeners, whether consciously or unconsciously. People relate to the forms of music they listen to and can change their behaviors to suit it. In this modern age, where lyrics are written without regard for moral standards, it is easy for it to corrupt young, as well as weak minds and this poses a danger to society. For instance, research has shown that people who frequently listen to music that promotes any kind of violence, tend to develop these tendencies. It also explained that communities where these forms of music are popular report high crime rates. In conclusion, everywhere around the world, music can be found in different forms. Some are of the opinion that it is only beneficial, while others believe it can also  be detrimental to individuals and the public. I believe that despite its good parts, music can influence people and their surroundings negatively.
Music
is
rapidly
becoming a vital part of human existence as it
is cherished
globally. Although,
some
are of the school of
thought
that
music
has a
positive
impact on
people
and communities, others believe it can
also
have deleterious effects
instead
. In my opinion,
music
is capable of having
deterimental
effects on humans and their communities.

On one hand,
music
has benefited mankind
tremendously
since the dawn of time. It has relaxing properties on the body,
especially
in its slow
forms
. It can even calm the fiercest of persons.
In addition
, it gives
people
a means to express themselves and has been
used
for centuries as a
form
of communication.
For example
, in 2011,
a research
carried out at the Harvard medical institute, revealed that listening to
music
can
significantly
lower blood pressure,
as well
as improving mood. This has been
so
adapted that it has recently being
used
to calm hysterical
patients


On the other hand
,
music
tends to influence the life of its listeners, whether
consciously
or
unconsciously
.
People
relate to the
forms
of
music
they listen to and can
change
their behaviors to suit it. In this modern age, where lyrics
are written
without regard for moral standards, it is easy for it to corrupt young,
as well
as weak minds and this poses a
danger
to society.
For instance
, research has shown that
people
who
frequently
listen to
music
that promotes any kind of violence, tend to develop these tendencies. It
also
explained
that communities where these
forms
of
music
are popular report high crime rates.

In conclusion
, everywhere around the world,
music
can
be found
in
different
forms
.
Some
are of the opinion that it is
only
beneficial, while others believe it can
also
 
be detrimental to individuals and the public. I believe that despite its
good
parts,
music
can influence
people
and their surroundings
negatively
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music only brings benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however think that music can have a negative influence on both. v. 4

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