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Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v.6

Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v. 6
Professionals such as doctors, scientists and teachers are migrating to developed countries in colossal number. This situation is called as brain-drain. As a result of brain-drain, native countries suffer from a skills shortage and economic stagnation. However, these problems can be sorted out if they are receiving what they expect. When more and more talent, move towards the developed nations such as the USA, Canada, the number of talented people will decrease and will affect thousands of lives in native countries. For instance, if the majority of teachers or doctors are settled down in other countries, then the number of uneducated people will increase and thousands of people who seek for medical care will be unattended. Furthermore, a country is rich by these skilled people only so when a country face skills shortage then it also depletes the economic stability as the native country needs to ask for foreign aids. Nevetherless, when the root cause is known then solution can be found out. Professionals are migrating because they receive better opportunity, lifestyle and monetary growth in other countries. So if the same is provided by the government in their homeland, then they will be satisfied and will not think to move somewhere else. For instance, teachers in India are paid less in comparison with the other countries so to satisfy their needs, they move to those countries where they are paid higher and their skills are valued. To sum up, brain drain can cause skills shortage and economic stagnation, but if skilled people are valued, paid according to their skill level, then this problem can be sorted out up to an extent.
Professionals such as doctors, scientists and teachers are migrating to developed
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countries
in colossal number. This situation
is called
as brain-drain.
As a result
of brain-drain, native
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countries
suffer from a
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skills
shortage and economic stagnation.
However
, these problems can
be sorted
out if they are receiving what they
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expect
.

When more and more talent,
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move
towards the developed nations such as the USA, Canada, the number of talented
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people
will decrease and will affect thousands of
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lives
in native
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countries
.
For instance
, if the majority of teachers or doctors
are settled
down in other
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countries
, then the number of uneducated
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people
will increase and thousands of
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people
who seek for medical care will
be unattended
.
Furthermore
, a
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country
is rich by these skilled
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people
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only
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so
when a
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country
face
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skills
shortage then it
also
depletes the economic stability as the native
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country
needs to
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ask for
foreign aids.

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Nevetherless
, when the root cause
is known
then solution can
be found
out. Professionals are migrating
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because
they receive better opportunity, lifestyle and monetary growth in other
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countries
.
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So
if the same
is provided
by the
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government
in their homeland, then they will
be satisfied
and will not
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think
to
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move
somewhere else.
For instance
, teachers in India
are paid
less
in comparison
with the other
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countries
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so
to satisfy their needs, they
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move
to those
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countries
where they
are paid
higher and their
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skills
are valued
.

To sum up, brain drain can cause
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skills
shortage and economic stagnation,
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but
if skilled
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people
are valued
, paid according to their
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skill
level, then this problem can
be sorted
out up to an extent.
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IELTS essay Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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