Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Mothers generally stay home to take care of their children after pregnancy. Do you support the opinion that these mothers should be compensated by the government? v.1

Mothers generally stay home to take care of their children after pregnancy. Do you support the opinion that these mothers should be compensated by the government? v. 1
There is a controversial issue about еру payments to unemployed mothers with infants. Some social workers state that authorities should support them financially, while some politicians think that they should be deprived of any state payment. In this essay, I will consider both points of view and agree with the idea of financial backing. Let us start with reasons why some politicians argue that after pregnancy mothers should receive governmental money. The first reason is that they need money to contribute to family income. Women rarely have the opportunity to work part-time, while they are doing child rearing, so they earn no money for household needs, but with the monetary help from the state they could afford more. Another reason is that many single mothers with infants hardly make ends meet. Many women support their little children alone, which aggravates their and children' s existence, so authorities should alleviate their financial burden by providing some money. Therefore, it is reasonable for officials to support mothers with money as a compensation for maternity after pregnancy. However, some politicians say that the government should not reimburse women at home for motherhood. They justify their opinion with the following arguments. Firstly, authorities are incapable to assist all mothers. The budget of the country cannot allocate huge fundings for millions of women in maternity, because it is responsible for other essential programs, such as supporting orphans and building social facilities. Secondly, it may create problems to the economy. If officials compensated each woman for being unable to work due to child caring, the budget would suffer from deficiency, which would negatively affect other social programs. As a result, it is irrational to bring changes to the budget in favor of unemployed mothers. In conclusion, even though some politicians advocate that authorities should abandon any attempt to compensate jobless mothers for motherhood, I think that they should help them, because they usually fail to lead a normal life with no monetary support from the government.
There is a controversial issue about
Possible spelling mistake found.
еру
payments to unemployed mothers with infants.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
social workers state that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
authorities
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
them
financially
, while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
politicians
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that they should
be deprived
of any state payment. In this essay, I will consider both points of view and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of financial backing.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
us
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with reasons why
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
politicians
argue that after pregnancy mothers should receive governmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
. The
first
reason is that they need
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
to contribute to family income.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Women
rarely have the opportunity to work part-time, while they are doing child rearing,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they earn no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
for household needs,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
with the monetary
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from the state they could afford more. Another reason is that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
single mothers with infants hardly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
ends
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
children alone, which aggravates their and
Possible spelling mistake found.
children&
#039; s existence,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
authorities
should alleviate their financial burden by providing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
.
Therefore
, it is reasonable for officials to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
mothers with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
as a compensation for maternity after pregnancy.

However
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
politicians
say that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should not reimburse
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
at home for motherhood. They justify their opinion with the following arguments.
Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
authorities
are incapable to assist all mothers. The budget of the country cannot allocate huge
Possible spelling mistake found.
fundings
for millions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
in maternity,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is responsible for other essential programs, such as supporting orphans and building social facilities.
Secondly
, it may create problems to the economy. If officials compensated each woman for being unable to work due to child caring, the budget would suffer from deficiency, which would
negatively
affect other social programs.
As a result
, it is irrational to bring
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
to the budget in favor of unemployed mothers.

In conclusion
,
even though
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
politicians
advocate that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
authorities
should abandon any attempt to compensate jobless mothers for motherhood, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that they should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they
usually
fail to lead a normal life with no monetary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
support
from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Mothers generally stay home to take care of their children after pregnancy. Do you support the opinion that these mothers should be compensated by the government? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts