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Childhood is the happiest time of a person’s life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.2

Childhood is the happiest time of a person’s life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2
Everyone wants to do back to his or her childhood because it is heaven of alive human. Some people may say that childhood is not happiest time of person’s life. However, I firmly agree that Childhood is the happiest time of a person’s life. I think because of the following reasons. First, a child has no responsibility. Unlike adult person, child is a very innocent human being. Therefore, he/ she is not concern with the way of life, money, job, study etc. children can enjoy their life without any stress. As a child, what I want is sleep, play and food. For example, I remember, when I was five year old, I attended playgroup in my hometown. After coming to home, I always went to play with my friends at our community’s city park. We played there different games like football, cricket etc. It was fun to spend time with friends. My father, a businessman, he always talked with my mom regarding his work issue. I never knew what he was talking about. I was stress free, as I did not understand any things. However, as grow up, I got more understanding about life. When I was in school, I leant about exam stress, worries about career selection etc. some time I feel what if I always be a child, it’s good to be stayed away from the all responsibility of life. You can see, child life is really stress free, so any one can feel pleasant time. Second, child is always pampered a lot by their family members, siblings, and relatives. Children get everything, what they want. No one can refuse them or stop them. It sounds fun to enjoy life without any obstacle. For example, I remember my forth birthday. My birthday is on a charismas day. I demanded to celebrate it in theme park to my parents. I imitated it from my friend, who did the same thing. My parents refused me at first sight. However, on second thought, my mother managed all things and she did whole birthday party arrangement. We had a blast. I never ever forget that. My all friends were present there and enjoyed a lot. I remember, I got many toys in presents. My grandma was alive and she gifted me a plan top with remote control. All relative gave me gifts now and then on different festivals also. Moreover, in those days friends were so nice, they never had competition feeling, they all were kind. On other hand, right now I have a fair –weather friend. If anything happens good to me they do green with envy. All in all, childhood is time when you pamper by others. In a nutshell, I definitely believe that childhood is the happiest time of person’s life because child has no responsibility and they are always pamper by others. What would be best than our childhood? All children should allow to enjoy their
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childhood
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because
it is heaven of alive human.
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people
may say that childhood is not
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happiest
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time
of
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person’s
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life
.
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, I
firmly
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agree
that Childhood is the happiest
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time
of a
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person’s
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life
. I
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think
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because
of the following reasons.

First
, a
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child
has no responsibility. Unlike adult
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person
,
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child
is a
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very
innocent human being.
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, he/ she is not concern with the way of
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life
, money, job, study etc. children can enjoy their
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life
without any
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stress
. As a
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child
, what I want is sleep, play and food.
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, I remember, when I was five year
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old
, I attended playgroup in my hometown. After coming to home, I always went to play with my
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friends
at our community’s city park. We played there
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different
games like football, cricket etc. It was fun to spend
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time
with
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friends
. My father, a businessman, he always talked with my mom regarding his work issue. I never knew what he was talking about. I was
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stress
free, as I did not understand any things.
However
, as grow up, I
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got
more understanding about
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life
. When I was in school, I
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leant
about exam
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stress
, worries about career selection etc.
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some
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time
I feel what if I
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always be
a
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child
, it’s
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good
to
be stayed
away from the all responsibility of
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life
. You can
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see
,
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child
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life
is
really
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stress
free,
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so
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any one
can feel pleasant time.

Second,
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child
is always pampered a lot by their family members, siblings, and relatives. Children
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get
everything, what they want. No one can refuse them or
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stop
them. It sounds fun to enjoy
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life
without any obstacle.
For example
, I remember my forth birthday. My birthday is on a
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charismas
day. I demanded to celebrate it in
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theme
park to my parents. I imitated it from my
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friend
, who did the same thing. My parents refused me at
first
sight.
However
, on second
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thought
, my mother managed all
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things and
she did whole birthday party arrangement. We had a blast. I never ever forget that. My all
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friends
were present there and enjoyed a lot. I remember, I
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got
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many
toys in presents. My grandma was
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alive and
she gifted me a plan top with remote control. All relative gave me gifts
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now
and then on
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different
festivals
also
.
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, in those days
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friends
were
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so
nice, they never had competition feeling, they all were kind. On other hand, right
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now
I have a
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fair
–weather
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friend
.
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If
anything happens
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good
to me they do green with envy. All in all, childhood is
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time
when you pamper by others.

In a nutshell, I definitely believe that childhood is the happiest
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time
of
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person’s
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life
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because
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child
has no
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responsibility and
they are always
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pamper
by others. What would be
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best
than our childhood? All children should
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allow
to enjoy
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their
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay Childhood is the happiest time of a person’s life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
487 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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