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Most successful inventions do not rely on complicated technology. In fact, some of the world’s greatest inventions have been very simple things. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Most successful inventions do not rely on complicated technology. In fact, some of the world’s greatest inventions have been very simple things. v. 1
It is true that modern devices or gadgets have greatly influenced our everyday lives since the dawn of technological development, with some claiming that such successful inventions are not always sophisticated. Personally, I completely agree with this viewpoint and I will explain why in this essay. Perhaps no one can deny that some of the most useful creations in the world are quite simplistic, especially in the past with the absence of modern technology. Long time ago, many inventors relied heavily on their imagination or creativity to generate simple but remarkable tools or devices by watching the surrounding environment. Furthermore, these inventions set a strong foundation for many thousands of modern helpful gadgets later, ranging from the stationery used in the workplace or offices to useful drugs in many medical subjects. One obvious example of this is paper which is made by grinding trees into pulp and then flattened this material to create the final product. This simply-made produce appears to be very essential in many parts of our lives where people need to take notes or keep records of anything. Another great unsophisticated invention is the wheel which is applied in diverse aspects of modern life. From my viewpoint, I cannot imagine that an airplane could take off without wheels on the runway or a machine could function properly missing its most important circle-looking items. By contrast, I can understand why some might hold the view that the majority of up-to-date creations are always complicated. Those people point to a rich diversity of complex machines or robots that are on a daily basis, improving our quality of life as well as curing us from chronic diseases like hepatitis or asthma. However, such 21st-century devices would never be made without handy uncomplicated inventions from the very beginning. In conclusion, it appears that some of the most considerable inventions that have a great impact on our normal lives are not always complex as we take into consideration simplistic tools such as the paper or wheel.
It is true that
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modern
devices or gadgets have
greatly
influenced our everyday
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lives
since the dawn of technological development, with
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some
claiming that such successful inventions are not always sophisticated.
Personally
, I completely
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agree
with this viewpoint and I will
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explain
why in this essay.

Perhaps no one can deny that
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some
of the most useful creations in the world are quite simplistic,
especially
in the past with the absence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
technology. Long time ago,
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many
inventors relied
heavily
on their imagination or creativity to generate simple
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but
remarkable tools or devices by watching the surrounding environment.
Furthermore
, these inventions set a strong foundation for
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many
thousands of
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modern
helpful gadgets later, ranging from the stationery
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used
in the workplace or offices to useful drugs in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
medical subjects. One obvious example of this is paper which
is made
by grinding trees into pulp and then flattened this material to create the final product. This
simply
-made produce appears to be
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very
essential in
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many
parts of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
where
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people
need to take notes or
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keep
records of anything.

Another great unsophisticated invention is the wheel which
is applied
in diverse aspects of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
life. From my viewpoint, I cannot imagine that an airplane could take off without wheels on the runway or a machine could function
properly
missing its most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
circle-looking items. By contrast, I can understand why
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
might hold the view that the majority of up-to-date creations are always complicated. Those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
point to a rich diversity of complex machines or robots that are on a daily basis, improving our quality of life
as well
as
The usual collocation for "curing" is "of" not "us". Did you mean "curing us of"?
curing us from
chronic diseases like hepatitis or asthma.
However
, such 21st-century devices would never
be made
without handy uncomplicated inventions from the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beginning.

In conclusion
, it appears that
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some
of the most considerable inventions that have a great impact on our normal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
are not always complex as we take into consideration simplistic tools such as the paper or wheel.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Most successful inventions do not rely on complicated technology. In fact, some of the world’s greatest inventions have been very simple things. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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