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Government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.3

Government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. v. 3
Some people believe that railways need to be more prioritized in terms of development rather that roads. I totally agree with this statement because trains are proven to be more faster and environmentally friendly. Investing extra funds for the extension of railways contributes a lot in terms of saving time and money from the public. This is because a single train can commute enormous amount of people and good in a short period of time. Therefore, people will spend less time on transportation and can focus more on doing productive work for themselves and well as the society. Citizens of a nation can also travel long distances multiple times faster than cars by just paying little amount of fees. For instance, the British government spends 80% of its infrastructure funds on maintaining their country railways so that people won't have to face long waiting hours for commuting. Similarly, trains are proven to be less harmful to the environment when compared with cars. Trains today uses fewer internal combustion engines, thus reducing the potential of carbon emission. In terms of cars which emits pollution and toxic gases, the train seem more productive, thus deserves development to a greater extent. For example, 50 countries are participating in the program organized by the UN in order to open underground metro service which will cut the usage of cars and bikes. In conclusion, a nation should divert funds towards railway construction as much as possible and specialize less on roads as this aids a country to improve commuting time and achieve a healthy environment.
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people
believe that
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railways
need to be more prioritized in terms of development
rather
that roads. I
totally
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agree
with this statement
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because
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trains
are proven
to be
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more faster
and
environmentally
friendly.

Investing extra funds for the extension of
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railways
contributes a lot in terms of saving
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time
and money from the public. This is
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because
a single
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train
can commute enormous amount of
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people
and
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good
in a short period of
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time
.
Therefore
,
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people
will spend less
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time
on transportation and can focus more on doing productive work for themselves and well as the society. Citizens of a nation can
also
travel long distances multiple
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times
faster than
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cars
by
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just
paying
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little
amount of fees.
For instance
, the British
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government
spends 80% of its infrastructure funds on maintaining their country
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railways
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so
that
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people
won't
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have to
face long waiting hours for commuting.

Similarly
,
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trains
are proven
to be less harmful to the environment when compared with
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cars
.
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Trains
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today
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uses
fewer internal combustion engines,
thus
reducing the potential of carbon emission. In terms of
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cars
which emits pollution and toxic gases, the
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train
seem more productive,
thus
deserves development to a greater extent.
For example
, 50 countries are participating in the program organized by the UN in order to open underground metro service which will
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cut
the usage of
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cars
and bikes.

In conclusion
, a nation should divert funds towards
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railway
construction as much as possible and specialize less on roads as this aids a country to
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improve
commuting
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time
and achieve a healthy environment.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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