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It could b e argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions Which opinion do you agree with In your essay include supporting details v.1

It could b e argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions Which opinion do you agree with In your essay include supporting details v. 1
Healthy mind and a healthy body is the need of every nation. While, some people believe that it's an individual accountability to look after their own fitness and eating habits. Others, argue that the legislation should intervene to ascertain that their nationals follow a nutritious diet and a healthy regime. I firmly opine that an amalgamation of these two thoughts can lead to a healthier community all together. This essay will examine both the views and will draw an inference. It is a sole responsibility of a person to take care of his own health. If an individual is not able to pursue a healthy daily routine, it will certainly have a direct impact on his well-being. For instance, people who follow sedentary style of living, are more prone to get health issues such as obesity, diabetes, high/low blood pressure and so on. As a result, that person cannot contribute positively to his community both personally and professionally. Hence, it becomes an obligation of a responsible citizen to follow a healthy daily routine, in order to make his association wholesome. However, in this fast paced busy life, people inevitably follow a sluggish lifestyle just for their convenience, which in turn is having a detrimental effect on our fraternity. In such situation, if the legislation mediates to spread awareness among its nationals, it will definitely boost the sentiments of its people to follow a vigorous mode of life. To illustrate, US state unions run several camps to sensitize its people to go for a regular walk, climb stairs instead of taking lifts and elevators, which in turn has made many nationals follow a healthier life (as they consider this as their government's devotion and consideration towards them). To recapitulate, having mulled over above stated arguments and information, and deliberating all the facts, it can be deducted that the law-making body's interference can definitely make people follow a healthy daily routine. Although, it cannot force its' people, hence, it remains an individual's own responsibility to take care of his fitness. I strongly feel that, in order to have a sound society, individuals should take care of their own fitness, and the government should spread awareness, to ensure more pronounced effect on its people.
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Healthy
mind and a
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healthy
body is the need of every nation. While,
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some
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people
believe that it's an individual accountability to look after their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
fitness and eating habits. Others, argue that the legislation should intervene to ascertain that their nationals
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follow
a nutritious diet and a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
regime. I
firmly
opine that an amalgamation of these two thoughts can lead to a healthier community all together. This essay will examine both the views and will draw an inference.

It is a sole responsibility of a person to take care of his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
health. If an individual is not able to pursue a
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healthy
daily routine, it will
certainly
have a direct impact on his well-being.
For instance
,
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people
who
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follow
sedentary style of living, are more prone to
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get
health issues such as obesity, diabetes, high/low blood pressure and
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so
on.
As a result
, that person cannot contribute
positively
to his community both
personally
and
professionally
.
Hence
, it becomes an obligation of a responsible citizen to
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follow
a
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healthy
daily routine, in order to
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make
his association wholesome.

However
, in this
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fast
paced busy life,
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people
inevitably
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follow
a sluggish lifestyle
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just
for their convenience, which in turn is having a detrimental effect on our fraternity. In such situation, if the legislation mediates to spread awareness among its nationals, it will definitely boost the sentiments of its
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people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
follow
a vigorous mode of life. To illustrate, US state unions run several camps to sensitize its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to go for a regular walk, climb stairs
instead
of taking lifts and elevators, which in turn has made
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many
nationals
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follow
a healthier life (as they consider this as their
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government
's devotion and consideration towards them).

To recapitulate, having mulled over above stated arguments and information, and deliberating all the facts, it can
be deducted
that the law-making body's interference can definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
follow
a
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healthy
daily routine. Although, it cannot force
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its'
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people
,
hence
, it remains an individual's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
responsibility to take care of his fitness. I
strongly
feel that, in order to have a sound society, individuals should take care of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
fitness, and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should spread awareness, to ensure more pronounced effect on its
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people
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay It could b e argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions Which opinion do you agree with In your essay include supporting details v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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