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The chase film was a popular form of comedy during the silent film era of the early twentieh century. In a chase film, the story was simple to tell and simple for the audience to follow. All the filmakers needed to do was to establish some offense- a thef v.1

The chase film was a popular form of comedy during the silent film era of the early twentieh century. In a chase film, the story was simple to tell and simple for the audience to follow. All the filmakers needed to do was to establish some offense- a thef v. 1
Some people claim that countries should make their requirements for getting study visas more easier. Personally, I agree with this notion as supporting overseas students to travel for studying will affect positively on not only the scientific research, but also would allow exchanging experts from all over the universe. As we became a part of globalization after the industrial revolution in 1919, the world turned into a small village, which facilitated the movement of students among countries. Many governments have begun to attract more students to study by offering student visas with a lower price, others tend to shorten the length of time for rewarding it. All Countries which chosen those approaches, converted to a fertile land of cultural diversity. For instance, USA is known for being the first educational destination in the earth by reducing restrictions on USA Visas, that led to make it the optimum choice for foreign students to conduct their research projects there. There are Many ways that embassies could offer to serve overseas students, that’s might generate some sorts of competitiveness to attract more students. For example, a study abroad exhibition is conducted nowadays in Cairo, organised by some representatives of different countries to show their promotions for getting student visas easier. To sum up, the more easy for getting a student visa the more progress will be achieved by those countries. Thus, ensuring the flourish and welfare of the whole world. Each government should allocate a part of her budget to fund those types of visas in order to make the education for the public.
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people
claim that
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countries
should
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make
their requirements for getting study visas
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more easier
.
Personally
, I
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agree
with this notion as supporting overseas
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students
to travel for studying will affect
positively
on not
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only
the scientific research,
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but
also
would
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allow
exchanging experts from all over the universe.

As we became a part of globalization after the industrial revolution in 1919, the world turned into a
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small
village, which facilitated the movement of
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students
among
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countries
.
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Many
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governments
have begun to attract more
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students
to study by offering
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student
visas with a lower price, others tend to shorten the length of time for rewarding it. All
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Countries
which chosen those approaches, converted to a fertile land of cultural diversity.
For instance
, USA
is known
for being the
first
educational destination in the earth by reducing restrictions on USA Visas, that led to
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make
it the optimum choice for foreign
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students
to conduct their research projects there.

There are
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Many
ways that embassies could offer to serve overseas
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students
, that’s might generate
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some
sorts of competitiveness to attract more
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students
.
For example
, a study abroad exhibition
is conducted
nowadays in Cairo,
Possible spelling mistake. 'organised' is British English.
organised
by
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some
representatives of
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different
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countries
to
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show
their promotions for getting
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student
visas easier.

To sum up, the more easy for getting a
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student
visa the more progress will
be achieved
by those
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countries
.
Thus
, ensuring the flourish and welfare of the whole world. Each
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should allocate a part of her budget to fund those types of visas in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the education for the public.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The chase film was a popular form of comedy during the silent film era of the early twentieh century. In a chase film, the story was simple to tell and simple for the audience to follow. All the filmakers needed to do was to establish some offense- a thef v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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