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Most people take interviews to elect a person for job What are the other ways What do you think is the best way to recruiters new employees v.1

Most people take interviews to elect a person for job What are the other ways What do you think is the best way to recruiters new employees v. 1
Stress is the psychological condition of a person that can happen when they are having problems with something which they cannot get through. According to some psychologists, stress can be overcome in day to day life if they stay neutral for some time of the day. I agree with this statement, however, talking with someone also eases the stress. To begin with, stress is not something that we can take lightly. Our body is like a machine which needs energy and some rest to work properly, as same as the motor car needs fuel to run. If we take a nap during the everyday time for 10mins, it will help to regain the energy that we lost and help to focus on the task. For example, a hospital in Italy lets the doctors and nurses take a nap about 10mins accordingly, which boosts their effectiveness in the work. Secondly, our mind is the only body part that runs 24hours even if we are asleep. So, when we cannot do something or get bothered with anything, we are likely to develop stress, however, if we take a break between our works and talk with someone then it also cools the mind. Although people know that sharing a problem can reduce stress, they don't share because of their ego. So sharing can also help to overcome the tension. In conclusion, taking a nap and break during work time is essential to fight the tensity and same way sharing the problem also helps to get rid of the strain.
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through. According to
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stress
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in day to day life if they stay neutral for
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some
time of the day. I
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with this statement,
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eases
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stress
.

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begin
with,
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stress
is not something that we can take
lightly
. Our body is like a machine which needs energy and
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some
rest to work
properly
, as same as the motor car needs fuel to run. If we take a nap during the everyday time for 10mins, it will
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help
to regain the energy that we lost and
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help
to focus on the task.

For example
, a hospital in Italy
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lets
the doctors and nurses take a nap about 10mins
accordingly
, which boosts their effectiveness in the work.

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, our mind is the
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body part that runs 24hours even if we are asleep.
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, when we cannot do something or
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bothered with anything, we are likely to develop
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stress
,
however
, if we take a break between our works and talk with someone then it
also
cools the mind. Although
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people
know that sharing a problem can
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stress
, they don't share
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because
of their ego.
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sharing can
also
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help
to overcome the tension.

In conclusion
, taking a nap and break during work time is essential to fight the tensity and same way sharing the problem
also
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helps
to
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get
rid of the strain.
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IELTS essay Most people take interviews to elect a person for job What are the other ways What do you think is the best way to recruiters new employees v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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