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Most people prefer to eat outside food rather than homemade food now. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Most people prefer to eat outside food rather than homemade food now. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
The number of people going to areas with extreme climate conditions has increased recently. People choosing to visit such unexplored lands get to witness the beauty of nature without adulteration. Due to low traction, these are cheaper holiday options. But, risks might be unknown and facilities not up to the mark. This essay shall cover the merits and demerits for travellers of going to unconventional travel destinations. One of the biggest benefits is, though the number of travellers going out in the wild is on the rise, but still only limited individuals have been there. This means that the place still has its natural beauty intact with less crowd and pollution. For instance, those visiting the Bali Island usually complain that the beaches are full with bottles and plastic bags all over the place spoiling their experience. The beaches in the far east of Africa don't face all these. Another advantage is, with demand still low for these locations, they are still cheaper to visit. For example, holiday in the deserts of Saudi Arabia requires an estimated budget of around Rs 250, 000 while desert's of Oman shall cost around Rs 100, 000 only. On the contrary, there may be unknown risks in these unknown lands and facilities too low. An example of this is that we have only a handful of accounts of travels on how the drive through the Thar Desert is. There is not much information on the animals that may attack at night except one blogger Li Chang mentioning about Snakes. Also, the housing facilities and medical facilities are limited there. In conclusion, although it will help unleash the beauty of nature, but there are many dangers associated with it. One should always be ready and careful about them.
The number of
people
going to areas with extreme climate conditions has increased recently.
People
choosing to visit such unexplored lands
get
to witness the beauty of nature without adulteration. Due to low traction, these are cheaper holiday options.
But
,
risks
might be unknown and facilities not up to the mark. This essay shall cover the merits and demerits for
travellers
of going to unconventional travel destinations.

One of the biggest benefits is, though the number of
travellers
going out in the wild is on the rise,
but
still
only
limited individuals have been there. This means that the place
still
has its natural beauty intact with less crowd and pollution.
For instance
, those visiting the Bali Island
usually
complain that the beaches are
full with
bottles and plastic bags all over the place spoiling their experience. The beaches in the far east of Africa don't face all these. Another advantage is, with demand
still
low for these locations, they are
still
cheaper to visit.
For example
, holiday in the deserts of Saudi Arabia requires an estimated budget of around Rs 250, 000 while desert's of Oman shall cost around Rs 100, 000
only
.

On the contrary
, there may be unknown
risks
in these unknown lands and facilities too low. An example of this is that we have
only
a handful of accounts of travels on how the drive through the Thar Desert is. There is not much information on the animals that may attack at night except one blogger Li Chang
mentioning about Snakes
.
Also
, the housing facilities and medical facilities
are limited
there.

In conclusion
, although it will
help
unleash the beauty of nature,
but
there are
many
dangers
associated with it. One should always be ready and careful about them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Most people prefer to eat outside food rather than homemade food now. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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