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A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety Therefore some people think that the government should increase spending on defence but spend less on social benefits To what extent do you agree v.1

A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety Therefore some people think that the government should increase spending on defence but spend less on social benefits 1
Nowadays masses have been using a huge range of web applications for translating languages. In my opinion, I think that benefits of such apps definitely outweigh the drawbacks it might bring. Admittedly, there are some negative aspects of using this modern technological facility. Firstly, it is not feasible to rely totally on such web services because access to the internet is not possible everywhere in the world. As a matter of fact, myriad of tourism destination include mountain peaks where it is almost impossible to use online lingual translation applications owing to in availability of the Internet services. Secondly, authenticity of translated content is another issue as there is still no mechanism available to ensure quality of these apps that whether these are translated accurately or not. Therefore, it can be said that disadvantages of using these applications should be considered in order to avoid any trouble. On the other hand, I believe that there is a huge range of potential benefits, which a person can take by taking guidance from online translated services. One of the main advantages is that now travelling has become a lot easier and interesting. For instance, tourists can easily inquire about available local facilities like inexpensive hotels, international restaurants and cost effective transportation services for the local residents. Furthermore, hiring a guide is not necessary anymore to interact with local inhabitants. Thus, visitors feel more secure now in terms of travel expenses and introduction to local traditions. In conclusion, although there are some issues which are related to the usage of online language translating programs, the advantages definitely outweigh the negative aspects if we use them with precautions.
Nowadays masses have been using a huge range of web applications for translating languages. In my opinion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that benefits of such apps definitely outweigh the drawbacks it might bring.

Admittedly
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
aspects of using this modern technological facility.
Firstly
, it is not feasible to rely
totally
on such web
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
services
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
access to the internet is not possible everywhere in the world. As a matter of fact, myriad of tourism destination include mountain peaks where it is almost impossible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
online lingual translation applications owing to in availability of the Internet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
services
.
Secondly
, authenticity of translated content is another issue as there is
still
no mechanism available to ensure quality of these apps that whether these
are translated
accurately
or not.
Therefore
, it can
be said
that disadvantages of using these applications should
be considered
in order to avoid any trouble.

On the other hand
, I believe that there is a huge range of potential benefits, which a person can take by taking guidance from online translated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
services
. One of the main advantages is that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
travelling has become a lot easier and interesting.
For instance
, tourists can
easily
inquire about available
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
facilities like inexpensive hotels, international restaurants and cost effective transportation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
services
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
residents.
Furthermore
, hiring a guide is not necessary anymore to interact with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
inhabitants.
Thus
, visitors feel more secure
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
in terms of travel expenses and introduction to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
traditions.

In conclusion
, although there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
issues which
are related
to the usage of online language translating programs, the advantages definitely outweigh the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
aspects if we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them with precautions.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety Therefore some people think that the government should increase spending on defence but spend less on social benefits 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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